Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many of people among the countries, rurals are moving to cities that affects on decreases of population, that may cause negative affective or not as development.

It will hurt the population since countryside are mainly focused on natural enviroment, but less people and cities are more technology, smartness based.

Both of them has differences on cons and pros, such as financial problem from high costs, smart technologies are supported in specific area, high paying jobs from big companies, taking care their families because of their disabilities or ages matter, and more along that none of us couldn't predict. But even tho countryside gets some declines usually, it wouldn't not be big impact since originally there it's a town with low population already and I don't think numbers would changes that much in all countries but it still decreases after times goes by, but not only from moving, many of them are highly aged persons too so it can also cause from passing away that leads to decrease.

The reasons why most of rural people leaving countrysides because shops and services moved too far or closed permenant due to low customer, high costs, or in rich case reached a goal to move with enough financial to live in other city, towns.

It can also be positive effect for the countryside since some people in cities prefers living to the town with low population places so they can relax, do what they always wanted to like farming, helping small village and including low costs. But in reality only few of them actually does this so, both of them eventually will get same answers and results.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You recognise that rural-to-urban migration can have both negative and positive effects, and you give relevant reasons, including the loss of local shops and services and the appeal of lower-cost rural living. However, the task asks you to decide whether this is positive or negative, and your position remains unclear: the opening asks whether it may be negative “or not,” while the conclusion says both places may get “same answers and results.” The discussion also lists several possible factors—such as jobs, family needs, ageing and deaths—without explaining how they support a definite judgement. State your view clearly in the introduction and conclusion, then develop two or three reasons with specific explanations or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to move from the general issue to causes and possible benefits. Some links are visible through phrases such as “The reasons why” and “It can also be positive effect.” However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and the relationship between them is not always clear. For example, the third paragraph shifts from financial problems and jobs to family care, ageing and population decline without a clear organising point. The final paragraph introduces a counterargument but does not resolve it. Give each paragraph one main purpose, use clearer transitions, and make references such as “both of them” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “natural environment,” “high-paying jobs,” “financial,” and “low population.” This shows some ability to discuss migration and its effects. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to understand, such as “negative affective,” “smartness based,” and “reached a goal to move with enough financial.” Spelling errors such as “enviroment” and “permenant” also reduce accuracy. Aim for common, precise collocations rather than assembling phrases word by word; for example, describe services as “closing permanently” and people as “moving to the city after saving enough money.” Check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use clauses with “since,” “because,” and “so,” but complex structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “Many of people … rurals are moving,” “Both of them has,” and “it wouldn't not be big impact.” There are also problems with sentence boundaries: the long sentence beginning “But even tho countryside gets some declines” joins several separate ideas, while the opening sentence is difficult to parse. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals and verb forms, and divide long sentences into shorter units. Build complexity gradually, ensuring each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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