Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People of most countries are migurating from rural to urban areas and the population in villages is becomming less. From my perspective it is negative development because of following significunces.

Agriculture is the core strength of every nations economy while farmers and villages are the strength of agriculture. Many industry like textile, food industry and some other industries are completely dependent of agriculture. Like cotton is the core need of textile and this is growing in villages also all food items are cultivated in villages by agriculture by farmers we also called them people of rural areas.

On the other hand, after the growth of migration towards cities this causes a lot of issues. One of the main issue in large cities is population which is caused by the people comming from villages. Because these people's have a lac of knowledge how to survive in the conjusted areas. Not all migrents are uneducated but some uneducated mens can treat ambiance of urban areas like rural area which can cause of pollution.

People move from rural places to cities for education, for earing purposes and to change there atmosphere. At some place its good for the growth of country, like educated people can understand the situation much better then people with no education. On the other hand, this is also good for industries like industries earns cheap labour while people get earning from the industries. But when bundle of people migurate from villages to cities this produce a lack of space in cities which cause much growth in the price of realstate in the area then people cannot afford living here this can increase in the ratio of theft, murders and roberies.

Summarise, when people migurate from villages to urban places this produces lack in agriculture and growth in the realstate value on that area and also increased in crime ratio of that particular area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration a negative development, and you give relevant reasons, including reduced agricultural capacity, pressure on city space and possible increases in crime. You also acknowledge benefits such as education and employment, which shows some awareness of both sides. However, the discussion is only partly developed. For example, the link between fewer rural residents and weaker agriculture is asserted rather than explained, and the claims about migrants causing pollution or crime are broad and unsupported by a specific example. The conclusion repeats the main points but does not add a clear final judgement about the balance of effects. Develop each reason with explanation or a concrete example, and keep the position consistently focused.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs and a concluding sentence, so there is some organisation. The ideas are generally related to the question, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a change in direction. However, progression is not always clear: the paragraph beginning “People move from rural places” shifts between reasons for migration, benefits to industry, housing costs and crime without clearly separating or connecting these points. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically, and the final “Summarise” does not form a natural conclusion. Plan one main idea for each paragraph, use clear topic sentences, and make references such as “this” or “these people” unambiguous so the reader can follow how each point supports your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “textile,” “migration,” “labour,” “pollution” and “real estate,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to read, for example “migurating,” “conjusted,” “earining” and “roberies.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “core strength of every nations economy” and “growth in the realstate value.” Aim to learn accurate forms and common collocations, such as “rural-to-urban migration,” “pressure on urban infrastructure” and “property prices.” More precise vocabulary would help you express the causes and consequences without relying on repeated general words such as “people,” “good” and “issues.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast between the benefits and drawbacks of migration. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some ideas hard to follow. For instance, “Many industry … are” has a number-agreement problem, while “this causes a lot of issues” does not clearly connect to the preceding clause. The final sentence, “this produces lack in agriculture and growth … and also increased in crime ratio,” combines structures that do not work grammatically. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating long ideas into complete sentences. Check articles and plural forms, and use conjunctions to show relationships clearly.

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