Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

i think this is a positive delelopment because by moving to city people will explore new area .firstly they meet new people and enhance there knowlege by intracting with new people .they are learning something new . secondly by moving to new city the will get new future opportunities . there are more chances of getting new and better jobs by whivh they earn good . moving futher what i think life is more easier than countryside as we all know there are not enough market in the vilaage but in cities we can find anything more easily .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You give a clear opinion that rural-to-urban migration is positive and offer relevant reasons: people can meet others, gain knowledge, find better jobs, and access shops more easily. However, the response addresses the task only partially because these points are stated briefly rather than explained or supported with examples. For instance, “better jobs” is not linked to a specific benefit for individuals or communities, and the comparison with village services is not developed. The response also contains 99 words, which is substantially below the required 250, leaving little room to fully explain your position. To strengthen the answer, develop each reason with explanation and a relevant example, and briefly consider any disadvantages before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your ideas follow a basic sequence: you state your view, give reasons, and add a comparison between city and countryside. Connectors such as “firstly,” “secondly,” and “moving further” help signal this progression. However, the response is presented as one continuous paragraph, and the links between points are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, the shift from job opportunities to easier access to markets is abrupt, while “moving further” does not clearly show how the next idea relates to the previous one. Organise the response into separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion. Use linking phrases that express the actual relationship between ideas, and make references such as “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “opportunities,” “interacting,” “knowledge,” and “better jobs,” so the main ideas can be understood. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or imprecise expressions reduce accuracy, including “delelopment,” “knowlege,” “intracting,” and “whivh.” Phrases such as “earn good” and “explore new area” are also not natural or precise in this context. Aim to learn accurate topic-related collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe people as “earning a higher income,” “accessing a wider range of services,” or “gaining exposure to new ideas.” This would make your points clearer and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate your main position using mostly simple sentence patterns, and the reader can generally follow the intended meaning. There is an attempt to connect clauses, as in “because by moving to city people will explore new area,” but the response shows limited variety in sentence structures and control is inconsistent. Examples include “there are not enough market” and “the will get,” where agreement or sentence formation is faulty, as well as missing or misplaced punctuation that makes the long final sentence difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms, and divide long ideas into complete sentences. Once these basics are more secure, try adding a few controlled complex sentences to explain causes and results.

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