Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To began the topic in diffierent cities around the world, simple individual are moving to other cities and lack the population in rural area ,it is a bid fact on societies .In my perspective is the nagetive struggle in countries.

Overall, there was clear that in my opinion the backwards areas is like that village, is the strong hand to grow the economy in many counties,Morever the big city is quickly increase the population to face diffierent issues , is like that traffics, health problems.

To began ,first of all to spend life in rural area people is much hard working men , to grow diffierent eating thinks e.g Wheat,Rice etc . In many product moving cities and out of country the rate of economy is greater . However the authoritirs administrater is cannot compelety facilitate is extremely problem of individuals. And in this fact people stay in own area and asist them everyone this ways is much better and to produced to big conspution of food.

On the other hand individuals moving to big country and to increasing the population in many city and is big problem to allover world ,futhermore people stay in city to automatically grow the traffic issues. At secondly this thinks when move different health diseases like, lung cancer ,asthma etc. In solve this solution to government should take the action and rural area to provide other facilitaties and individual devote good and happy life in own places and country to brtter grow.

In conclusion , individuals moving to big city is a bad effect is city and enhance to diffierent issue, village place is peaceful and enjoyable or people stay in own area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is identifiable: you consider rural-to-urban migration a negative development, and you give relevant reasons, including pressure on city traffic and health and the importance of rural food production. These points show that you understand the question. However, the response addresses the issue only partially because several ideas are difficult to interpret or are asserted without explanation. For example, you mention that rural residents grow wheat and rice, but do not clearly explain how their departure affects food supply or the wider economy. The proposed government action—providing facilities in rural areas—is relevant, but its likely effect is not developed. State your position clearly in the introduction and explain each main reason with a specific example or consequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas are broadly grouped: rural contributions are discussed before the effects of city growth. This gives the reader some overall organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking expressions do not always show the relationship between ideas. For instance, “However” introduces a point about authorities that is not clearly contrasted with the preceding claim, while “At secondly” is an inaccurate transition. Several sentences combine multiple points without clear connections, making the argument hard to follow. Use one central idea per paragraph, arrange supporting details in a clear sequence, and use simple links such as “as a result” or “for example” only where their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “population,” “economy,” “traffic issues,” and “health diseases,” and you try to express ideas about rural production and urban pressures. However, the range is limited and many word choices, collocations and spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “simple individual,” “big country” for a city, and “big conspution of food” are unclear or unsuitable in context. Repeated use of general words such as “problem,” “people” and “different” also limits precision. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms; prioritise clear, natural expressions over ambitious wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to form longer sentences and use clauses, but control is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. For example, “In my perspective is the nagetive struggle in countries” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the big city is quickly increase the population” has an incorrect verb form. Subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “people is much hard working men” and the long sentence beginning “To began, first of all.” Most sentences are not yet reliably accurate. Practise building clear simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking verb forms, agreement and punctuation.

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