Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In contemporary world, people want to live in city beacuse cities give them better opportunities. Although it creates several problems, but i firmly believe that it is a positive development becauses it gives better education facillities

health services.

On the one hand, Nobody can deny the fact that people can get better education in cities. Rural areas do not have higher education facilities. It has rare school for children. For example, after getting primary education, a person move to city with whole family for addmission in big university. this facilities is not avalible in rural area due to the lack of institutions. He can secure a better job in city after graduation. therefore, cities provide financial security and better education.

On the other hand, people can find a doctor in city easily as compare to rural area, where only local client is deal with lower professional knowledge. In addition, people can buy their medinices with lower price, who pay high cost in rural area because the lower availibilty of medinices.

Howerever, there are many disadvantage of increasing urban population. Due to high population in city, level of pollution is dramantically increasing day by day. people is facing problem of trafic congestion in city. Most of the time, traffic is blocked due to large range of cars on roads. These problem can be solved by government efforts. Government should encorage people to buy environment- friendly product and use local transportation for lower emission of gass in atmosphere. Government should also introduced better local transportation system with lower rent.

Wrapping up this write-up, rural people are moving to cities, thats why population in the urban area is increasing regularly. This approach give people a chance to avail better opportunities. Apart from that, this situation create many issues related to pollution and traffic congestion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration positive because it can improve access to education, healthcare and employment, while acknowledging pollution and congestion as drawbacks. These points address the question and are supported with examples, such as moving to attend university and finding medical care more easily in cities. However, some ideas are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the claim that medicines cost less in cities is not clearly connected to the comparison with rural areas, and the discussion of government solutions shifts attention away from evaluating whether the overall development is positive. Develop the reasons behind your judgement more fully and explain why the benefits outweigh the disadvantages you identify.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, paragraphs presenting benefits and drawbacks, and a concluding summary. The contrast between advantages and disadvantages is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand” and “However” help guide the reader. At times, though, the organisation feels mechanical or the links between ideas are unclear. The healthcare paragraph, for example, moves from access to doctors to medicine prices without explaining the connection, while “Wrapping up this write-up” is an awkward transition into the conclusion. Some references, such as “this facilities” and “These problem,” are also unclear. Use more precise linking and referencing, and make each paragraph develop one connected point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “higher education facilities,” “financial security,” “pollution,” and “traffic congestion.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “environment-friendly product” and “local transportation system.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: examples include “beacuse,” “facillities,” “medinices,” and “dramantically.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “large range of cars” and “lower emission of gass.” Aim to check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases. More precise vocabulary would help you express comparisons and causes without relying on repeated general words such as “better” and “problem.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a concession in “Although it creates several problems” and a reason clause beginning “because.” The main message is generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles and verb forms occur across the response. For example, “Although … but” combines two contrasting structures unnecessarily, “a person move” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “people is facing” uses the wrong verb form. There are also incomplete or poorly punctuated sentences, such as the opening sentence’s separated phrase “health services.” Work on producing complete sentences and checking agreement, articles and verb forms. Practising accurate complex sentences will help you express relationships between ideas more clearly.

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