Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I am writing to express my interest in assisting you in your home for a few hours a day next summer as you have advertised.

I am pleased to inform you that I have been pursuing my studies in hospitality and management, I could help you in kitchen and I have a considerable experience in gardening. I will also assist you in household chores.

Also, I am an international student and working at your house will not only help me to learn about different culture but also allow me broaden my horizons because I would be glad to interact with people from diverse background. Additionally, interacting with you in English may improve my communication skills. Working in your home will complement my theoretical knowledge of hospitality so I would be grateful if you provide me this opportunity to assist you.

Regarding my availability, I would be available on weekends and on Friday evenings after my university classes. However, I also work part-time as a receptionist at a hotel, I may not be available during the rest of the week.

I would really appreciate if you would consider me for this role. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Elizabeth Spencer

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you offer help with kitchen tasks, gardening and household chores; explain that the work would support your learning and English; and give specific availability on weekends and Friday evenings, while noting your hotel job. These details make the letter relevant and purposeful. However, the practical offer is not fully developed: you could specify particular duties or how your hospitality studies and gardening experience would help Mrs Barrett. The reason for wanting the role is also somewhat broad, focusing mainly on your own learning rather than what you can contribute. The response already shows clear coverage and some supporting detail, but more precise development of these ideas would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter is organised in a clear sequence: you introduce your interest, describe your experience and motivation, explain availability, and close politely. Paragraphing supports this progression, and linking phrases such as “Also,” “Additionally,” and “Regarding my availability” help the reader follow the points. The ideas are generally easy to connect, although the second paragraph combines several reasons and becomes dense; separating your practical qualifications from your personal motivation would make the progression more controlled. The contrast in the availability paragraph is understandable, but the relationship between your Friday availability and your other work commitments could be stated more explicitly. Overall, cohesion is effective, with some room for more flexible and precise linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal application, including “considerable experience,” “diverse background,” “complement my theoretical knowledge,” and “availability.” These choices communicate your qualifications and motivation clearly, and the tone is generally appropriate. Some expressions are less natural or precise, however: “help you in kitchen” and “assist you in household chores” could be phrased more idiomatically, while “learn about different culture” needs a more suitable form. “Working at your house” is understandable but less polished than language describing domestic assistance. The response shows attempts at more advanced vocabulary, but greater control of collocation and natural phrasing would make the letter sound more fluent and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and complex sentence forms, including the “not only … but also” construction and clauses introduced by “because” and “while.” Meaning remains clear throughout, but some grammatical errors occur. In “I have been pursuing my studies in hospitality and management, I could help,” two independent clauses are joined with a comma; use a full stop or a conjunction. Other examples include “allow me broaden” (which needs “to broaden”), “different culture” (which needs a plural or determiner), and “if you provide me this opportunity” (which needs a more accurate verb form and article). The availability sentence also joins two complete clauses with a comma. More consistent control of clause boundaries and small grammatical forms would improve accuracy.

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