Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing to inform you that I am available to help you in household chores during evening next summer.

I was working before at a restaurant so I have an excellent experience in cooking. I can make cuisines of different countries. It can be a great help for you. Moreover, I have my own car so I can assist you in grocery and shopping. I would be grateful to help you in cleaning and organizing things.

I would like to do all these things because I really need a flexible job where I can work comfortably without any stress. To be honest, I really need a part time job because I have to pay me college fees. After my college, I can easily help you for four to five hours.

I want to let you know that I can only work during evening after 3.00 P.M. on weekdays. The reason is that I have to attend my classes during morning. However, I am available to help you anytime on weekends.

I hope you will consider me. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours Sincerely,

Jasdeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you offer cooking, grocery shopping, cleaning and organising; explain that you need part-time work to pay your college fees; and specify weekday evenings after 3 p.m. as well as weekend availability. The letter maintains a suitable, polite purpose and gives relevant supporting details, such as your restaurant experience and car. The main limitation is that a few points could be more precise or developed. For example, “during evening” is not a fully clear description of your availability, and “after my college” leaves the timing of your four-to-five-hour work period uncertain. Clarifying these details and linking your skills more directly to Mrs Barrett’s likely needs would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you introduce your offer, describe the help you can provide, explain your motivation, and then set out your availability. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “To be honest,” and “However” help connect related points. The closing is also appropriate for a formal enquiry. Some connections are a little mechanical, and the list of services could be grouped more smoothly rather than presented as several separate statements. The relationship between your college schedule and the phrase “after my college” is also not entirely clear. More precise referencing and a few less formulaic transitions would make the flow more natural while preserving the effective overall organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including relevant terms such as “household chores,” “organizing,” “flexible job,” and “part time job.” Your meaning remains clear, and the references to cooking and shopping make the offer specific. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “excellent experience in cooking,” “make cuisines,” and “assist you in grocery and shopping” do not sound idiomatic. “Without any stress” is also rather general for explaining why this particular work appeals to you. Aim to use more precise, natural phrases for domestic tasks and work experience. This would improve fluency and appropriacy without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the reason clause in “because I have to pay…” and the contrast introduced by “However.” Most sentences communicate your meaning, and the availability details are understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, prepositions and sentence patterns. For example, “during evening” needs an article or plural form, and “help you for four to five hours” uses an awkward preposition in this construction. “I have to pay me college fees” also has an incorrect pronoun; use “my.” Review these patterns and check punctuation and capitalisation consistently. Greater accuracy in these areas, alongside your existing sentence variety, would strengthen control.

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