Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Madem,

I writing a letter behave on advertisement in social media you have need a worker for help her in her home for some hours a next summer.According to me I have try this job and I fit according your requrement because I have do all work related home like I prpare healthy food and londery as well as clening house.

I realy like this type work because befor few year I am house wife so I do this task very good way as well as I help for careing and I have experince how to treet in there childeran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You address the purpose of the letter by describing household tasks you could do, including preparing food, laundry and cleaning, and you explain that your experience as a housewife motivates you. However, the response is incomplete: it does not say when you are available or unavailable, and the reason for wanting the work is only briefly stated. The reference to caring for children is also unclear and not developed. The response contains 101 words, below the required 150, so there is not enough detail to cover the three bullet points fully. Add specific summer dates or times, explain your motivation, and develop each offer of help in a complete letter with an appropriate opening and closing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a basic sequence: you refer to the advertisement, describe your household skills, and then give a reason for applying. This gives the reader a general sense of your purpose. However, the response is presented as two long blocks with little clear separation of the task points, and the second paragraph ends without a complete closing or a clear transition. Linking expressions such as “because” and “as well as” are attempted, but the latter is repeated and does not always connect ideas clearly. Organise the letter into short paragraphs—application and skills, motivation, and availability—and use simple, accurate links to show how each point relates to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for domestic work, including “healthy food,” “laundry,” “cleaning house,” and “experience,” so the reader can identify the kind of help you are offering. The range is limited, however, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “Madem,” “behave on advertisement,” “requrement,” and “treet in there childeran.” Some expressions also sound unnatural, including “this type work” and “do this task very good way.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases for a job application, such as “I am writing in response to your advertisement” and “I have experience caring for children.” Check spelling and use precise terms for your skills and availability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “because” and “as well as,” but most sentence structures are not yet controlled. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in “I writing a letter” and “I have try this job”; the intended forms are “I am writing” and “I have tried.” There are also problems with articles, prepositions and agreement, as in “for some hours a next summer” and “I help for careing.” These errors sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses to explain your experience and schedule. Use full stops to separate complete ideas and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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