Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.
Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter
- suggest how you could help her in her home
- say why you would like to do this work
- explain when you will and will not be available
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mrs Barrett,
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Dear Mark
How are you my friend. It has been so long since we last met. I want to write you letter so many days. But i was busy with my work and i want let you know that i got my dream job.
Okay! let me know how is your work and new course. i hope you enjoy your work and study. i wish good luck for you and your future. also i want to congrats you on your new car.
lets! meet soon i will make a very taste Indian food for us. also we can have a nice coffee together. we will talk about this matter and i will give your advice on that.
can not wait see your soon. and have a nice days.
Yours Jaspreet Singh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a formal letter to Mrs Barrett regarding a job advertisement for home help. Instead, the student has written an informal, personal letter to a friend named Mark about a new job and a new car. Because the student failed to address any of the bullet points (suggesting help, explaining motivation, or stating availability) and failed to follow the required opening, the task achievement is severely compromised. Additionally, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which further impacts the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The letter is written as a single block of text without proper paragraphing. While there is a basic attempt to link ideas, the logical progression is weak because the content does not match the prompt. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as the abrupt transition 'Okay! let me know'. The structure lacks the formal conventions required for a letter of application, making the overall flow disjointed and confusing for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, consisting mostly of simple, everyday words. There is no attempt to use vocabulary relevant to a job application or professional correspondence. Errors in word choice, such as 'I want to congrats you' (should be 'congratulate') and 'I will give your advice' (should be 'give you advice'), indicate a limited range. The language is informal and unsuitable for the task, showing a lack of awareness regarding register and tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with sentence construction, such as 'I want to write you letter so many days' and 'can not wait see your soon'. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect capitalization and misuse of exclamation marks. The student relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently inaccurate. The lack of control over basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement is evident throughout the short text.
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