Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mrs. Barratt,

Hope this letter finds you in radiant health and best of spirits. I saw your advertisement in the newspaper in which you state that you are looking for a person as a helper for the coming summer.

To be more specific, Actually, I accomplished my studies in the last month, and I really need a job for fulfilling my daily basic needs and become independent. Undoubtedly, I am highly qualified and also exploring the vocation in my field. Additionally, for now, I want to earn something without wasting a precious day of my life.

In the next phase, I have good cooking skills, so, I can prepare food for you and meanwhile teach to your children also. Furthermore, I will always keep your house spic and span without disturbing to anyone. Apart from this, I am more pet friendly provided that you want I can take care of your pet during your absence.

Moving forward with this information, My availability will be 3 days per week such as friday, saturday, sunday. If you are interested in my profile please let me know. Thanks for your time. I look forward to hearing you soon. Take care.

Yours sincerely,

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You suggest specific tasks like cooking and pet care, explain your motivation for seeking employment, and clearly state your availability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although some phrasing is slightly unnatural. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, ensuring the reader understands your purpose and qualifications. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your qualifications and the specific needs of the employer is more seamless. Overall, the task is fully addressed with a clear purpose throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific requirement of the prompt. You use a variety of cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'Apart from this' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The progression of ideas is clear, and the paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, try to vary the sentence starters and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than relying on standard linking words at the beginning of every paragraph.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including some idiomatic expressions like 'spic and span' and 'radiant health'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'exploring the vocation in my field' and 'teaching to your children'. While these errors do not impede communication, they highlight a need for more precise usage. To improve, focus on learning collocations—words that naturally go together—rather than just individual vocabulary items. Expanding your range of formal expressions will also help elevate the tone of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'I accomplished my studies in the last month' (should be 'completed'), 'teaching to your children' (unnecessary preposition), and 'disturbing to anyone'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization after commas and the use of commas in lists. While these errors rarely impede the overall meaning, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and refining your use of prepositions to improve accuracy.

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