Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I hope you are doing well, I am writing this letter to express my desire to help you for a few hours a day next summer and I would like to explain the situation.

To begin with, I am graduated as a Personal Support Worker. I can provide the required services at ease. For instance, preparing meals, laundry, and other household chores, additionally I am aware the generic medications as well. Due to my study I know the procedures and documentations required to help others.

There is a motive why I like to do this work. I need a work experience in order to get my degree, and pursue my masters in the subjective field. Moreover, helping others is always been a passion for me, and that’s the reason I choose this pathway.

I would appreciate it if you would consider me as your home support worker. I have full time availability except weekends, or you can consider it as 40 hours per week.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Sukhman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly outline your skills as a Personal Support Worker, explain your motivation regarding your degree and passion for helping others, and specify your availability. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a potential employer. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are fully developed; for instance, you could provide more specific examples of how your experience would benefit Mrs Barrett in a home setting. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific requirement of the task. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'In addition', which help the flow of ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the connection between sentences is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate and contributes to the overall readability of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'Personal Support Worker', 'household chores', and 'medications'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'I am graduated' instead of 'I have graduated' and 'in the subjective field' which is slightly unclear in this context. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Focusing on more natural collocations and avoiding slightly awkward phrasing will help elevate your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I am graduated', 'I am aware the generic medications', and 'helping others is always been a passion'. These errors are noticeable but do not impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tenses and preposition usage. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you move toward a higher band. Punctuation is generally functional, though ensure you use periods rather than commas to separate independent clauses to avoid run-on sentences.

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