Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I have seen your advertisment for doing house chores for some hours in the next summer, that is why I am writing this letter to you.

I had an experience as a room servant in Marriot Hotel. Since I quit this job because of this Hotel is far from my home and travelling cost is more than I earned. As a Hotel servant I was responsible for more than 10 rooms in a day. So, I am keen at my work and also I can do a mopping, sweeping, vacuming, laundry and also do a garderning if possible.

As seen in advertisment, your place is only 10 minutes away from my home that is why I like you to giving hand in your home chores. But before you select me I know during a weekends you might go outside or sometimes your relatives visits you, during these time I am uncomfortable to do work infront of them. Monday to Friday as per your need I am available at anytime.

I hope this letter finds you well and give me a chance to work with you.

Best regards,

Krish

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: suggesting help, explaining your motivation, and clarifying your availability. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the explanation regarding your availability is slightly confusing; stating you are 'uncomfortable' working in front of guests might be perceived as unprofessional by a potential employer. To improve, ensure your ideas are presented in a way that highlights your reliability rather than your personal discomfort. The letter covers all requirements, but the development of ideas could be more professional to better suit the context of a job application.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Since', 'So', and 'But'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between your previous job experience and your current availability is a bit abrupt. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider range of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother. For instance, the connection between your proximity to the house and your desire to help could be linked more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to complete the task, using terms like 'advertisement', 'responsible', and 'gardening'. However, there are several word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'room servant' (instead of 'housekeeper' or 'room attendant'), 'travelling cost' (instead of 'commuting costs'), and 'giving hand' (instead of 'lending a hand'). Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'advertisment', 'vacuming', and 'garderning'. Improving your accuracy with job-related terminology and checking your spelling will significantly enhance your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I had an experience as a room servant' (should be 'I have experience'), 'because of this Hotel is far' (should be 'because this hotel is far'), and 'your relatives visits you' (should be 'your relatives visit you'). There are also issues with article usage and preposition placement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of conjunctions.

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