Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I am writing to express my interest in your job advertisement as a fruit picker during the summer that you have posted in a local newspaper. As a farming undergraduate student who has a summer holiday which is commenced by next week, I would therefore like to apply for this role.

I have a profound interest in planting fields since my research is related to tropical fruits, such as oranges and tomatoes. Moreover, one of my core assignments during the summer requires me to acquire practical field on planting areas. Hence, I think assisting you in your garden as a fruit picker can help me to broaden my knowledge to select the best fruits when they are ripe and conduct my research on tropical fruit diseases, which are caused by microorganisms and insects.

As this is advertised as a part-time position since you only need few , my preferred days would be on Monday, Wednesday, and Friday evenings. I am also available throughout the weekend on mornings.

I am looking forward to hearing from you. If you have any further questions, please let me know.

Yours sincerely,

Wismar Wijayanti

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, covering how you can help, why you want the job, and your availability. However, there is a significant issue regarding task relevance. The prompt asks you to help Mrs Barrett in her home, but you have interpreted the role as a 'fruit picker' for a farming position. This misinterpretation of the task context affects the overall quality of the response. While you have developed your ideas well, the content does not align with the specific scenario provided in the instructions. To improve, ensure you read the prompt details carefully to identify the nature of the work requested.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices effectively, such as 'Moreover', 'Hence', and 'As this is', which help guide the reader through your points. The progression of ideas is generally clear, moving from your interest in the role to your qualifications and finally your availability. However, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs could be smoother. The structure is functional and appropriate for a formal letter, and the paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate the different requirements of the task.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, including terms like 'profound interest', 'undergraduate student', and 'microorganisms'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'practical field on planting areas', which is slightly unnatural; 'practical field experience in agriculture' would be more precise. Additionally, there is a minor error in the third paragraph where you wrote 'you only need few', which is grammatically incomplete. Despite these small issues, your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly and shows an attempt to use more sophisticated language appropriate for a formal application.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'which is commenced by next week', which is awkward phrasing; 'which commences next week' would be better. You also have a minor error in 'planting fields', where 'working in fields' would be more accurate. While there are occasional errors in tense and word order, they do not impede communication. The majority of your sentences are clear, and you show a reasonable level of control over complex structures, though further attention to verb forms and prepositional usage would enhance your accuracy.

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