Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this to discuss about one women who is lives in your village, she advertised for someone to help her in her home.

Firstly, we should take into account the importance of women, which will contribute to the overall efficiency and well-being of the operations.

Also, if we consider the likelihood of I want to help her in her home like she learn about how to work from home and earn money, it is expected to have a three-fold effect for several reasons, like do independent.

Finally, I will help you on weekends because weekdays i want to go my office work that should not be neglected.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Kind regards,

John

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the task requirements effectively. While you mention helping Mrs Barrett, the content is largely irrelevant and confusing. For example, the second paragraph discusses the 'importance of women' in general, which is not requested. The third paragraph is difficult to follow, and the explanation of your availability is vague. Furthermore, the letter is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which severely limits your ability to develop the required points. To improve, ensure you focus strictly on the bullet points provided in the prompt and expand on your ideas with specific, relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a logical flow. While you use some basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Finally', the ideas within the paragraphs do not connect logically to the prompt or to each other. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is disjointed, and the overall structure is weak. The paragraphing is present, but the content within these paragraphs is often confusing or off-topic, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument or purpose.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is quite limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'discuss about one women who is lives' contain grammatical errors that also affect lexical clarity. You rely on very basic vocabulary and struggle to express your ideas precisely. For instance, 'do independent' is not a standard collocation. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary and focus on using words in their correct context, avoiding repetitive or overly simplistic phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Examples include 'discuss about one women who is lives', 'likelihood of I want to help', and 'weekdays i want to go my office work'. These errors involve subject-verb agreement, word order, and preposition usage. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and even these contain significant inaccuracies. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense and article usage.

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