Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.
Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter
- suggest how you could help her in her home
- say why you would like to do this work
- explain when you will and will not be available
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mrs Barrett,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Mrs barret,
My name is Jaspreet singh and recently i saw add on the social media regarding doing help in your home.So,I am willing to help you.I have many ideas which we can use while doing work in your house.
I would like to help you because I am a helpful person.Every time I will come forward whenever anyone need assist as it gives me a satisfaction and love of world.
When it comes to availability then i will present next some when you need mine. It would be good if we do this work on weekends because 1 will be free that time but please avoid in weekdays because I will busy in those days.whenever you need me then let me know and I started following you Facebook so whenever you need help please drop massage me I will come.
Your faithfully,
Jaspreet singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development is quite limited. You suggest helping in the home, but you do not specify what tasks you can perform (e.g., cleaning, gardening, or shopping). The reasons for wanting the job are vague, and your availability section is confusing, as you contradict yourself regarding weekends and weekdays. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the task completion. To improve, you should provide concrete examples of your skills and ensure your availability is clearly and logically stated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is divided into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. The transition between your motivation for the job and your availability is abrupt. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link your sentences, making the text feel like a series of isolated statements rather than a cohesive letter. For example, the shift from 'I am a helpful person' to 'When it comes to availability' lacks a logical bridge. Improving the use of linking words such as 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'however' would significantly enhance the readability and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrases like 'doing help' and 'doing work,' which are not natural collocations in this context. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'I will present next some' and 'I started following you Facebook,' which hinder clarity. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise vocabulary related to employment and household tasks, such as 'assist with chores,' 'flexible schedule,' or 'previous experience.' You should also focus on correct word forms and collocations to ensure your message is conveyed accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('I will busy'), incorrect verb tenses ('I started following you'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede communication. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure you use the correct tense for future availability, and pay closer attention to proofreading for minor errors like capitalization and missing words.
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