Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Mr. Brett. You are doing well. Recently, post an advertisement about you need a helper for your house holding and I just touch out that your information from website. Indeed, I would like to suggest you. I already have experience I already the household work and I almost done various, but like you planned with children’s meeting food and cleaning the house and windows, and I would like to do this work with yours. I am already. I have experience in this field and almost 5 more years, and that’s why I am comfortable with working with children’s working with others and I also have SRTP the such as first aid. If there is any emergency or I will, and I also have overthink in a restaurant as a chef, so meeting different foods and for my abilities, I will share with you. I am available both weekend and weekday except Wednesday because on Wednesday, I am working in another house and and you and feel free to get touch with me

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suggesting help, explaining the motivation, and stating availability. However, the development of these ideas is limited by significant language barriers. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the content is often repetitive and lacks the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task requirements in a natural way. For instance, the mention of 'children’s meeting food' is unclear, and the explanation of availability is slightly confusing due to grammatical errors. To improve, you should focus on clearly structuring your points into distinct paragraphs and ensuring your ideas are fully explained rather than just listed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, resulting in a series of disjointed statements. For example, the transition between your experience and your availability is abrupt. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing: one for the introduction, one for each bullet point, and one for the closing. Additionally, using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however' would help guide the reader through your letter more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. Phrases like 'house holding' instead of 'housekeeping' and 'touch out that your information' are unnatural and confusing. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express your professional experience clearly. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to work and household tasks. Try to avoid translating directly from your native language, as this often leads to awkward phrasing. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and verbs will help you convey your qualifications more professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that cause difficulty for the reader. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I almost done'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction ('I am already. I have experience...'). The sentence structure is mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty, such as 'If there is any emergency or I will'. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction: ensure every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Review your use of prepositions and verb tenses, and practice proofreading your work to catch simple errors like missing words or incorrect word forms.

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