Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

i am writing in response to your advertisement for someone to help you in your home for a few hours a day in next summer. i would like to provide my services for this task, because i have wide range of home services expertise.

I have been running a home services company since 2025. My team comprises of plumbers, carpenters, cleaners and electricians. we provide this services on a nominal rate. You can compare these service charges with other service provider companies.

as i have told you that i have a best team for home services and i am interested in this task just because of your home address exists near our office, it will be very easy for us to reach and grab this opportunity.

furthermore if you make your mind to avail our services, i would like to share our available slots and those are from 10:00am Monday to Friday.

i would like to hear a positive response from yourself.

Yours sincerely,

Mohsin

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suggesting help, explaining the motivation, and stating availability. However, the tone is inappropriate for the task. You are writing to an individual (Mrs Barrett) for a domestic help role, but you have written as if you are a business owner pitching a commercial company. This makes the content feel like a sales pitch rather than a personal offer of help. While the requirements are met, the approach lacks the personal touch expected in a General Training Task 1 letter, which limits the development of the ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, and the progression of ideas is clear. You use some cohesive devices like 'furthermore' and 'because', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the connection between the personal nature of the request and the business-like tone creates a slight disconnect in the flow of the letter. Overall, the structure is easy to follow, and the information is presented in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'advertisement', 'expertise', and 'nominal rate'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'grab this opportunity' (which sounds too aggressive for a personal letter) and 'make your mind to avail our services'. There are also some minor errors in article usage and pluralization, such as 'provide this services'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural, polite expressions suitable for a personal request.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with capitalization (e.g., 'i', 'we') and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'my team comprises of', 'your home address exists'). There are also issues with punctuation and sentence structure, such as the run-on sentence in the third paragraph. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy of the writing.

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