Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.
Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter
- suggest how you could help her in her home
- say why you would like to do this work
- explain when you will and will not be available
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mrs Barrett,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
dear, mrs barrett
Ihope you are doing well, i recently seen an advertisement saying you need a helper for few hours in your house.
I wanna inform you that we provide services of interal and exterior cleaning. We have more than 10,000 happy customers till now which are continuously growing with time. If you want you can checkup reviews by our clints or indoextocleaning.com. e will love to do service for you professionally to make your house more beautiful at very reasonable price which is just 30$ per hour and special coupe of 35$ if you hire us for more that 10 hours this offer is limited till this september. price might go up if the location is out of metrocity vary on distance. we are available monday to friday 7 am to 7 pm. please reachout us on business days by giving a call on [redacted phone] to book in advance.
we will be waiting to your responses as we are always here for you.
your trustly
cyz
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all three bullet points: suggesting help, explaining the motivation, and stating availability. However, the tone is inappropriate for the task. The prompt asks for a personal letter to an individual, but the response reads like a generic business advertisement. By referring to 'we' and 'our clients,' you fail to establish a personal connection with Mrs Barrett. Furthermore, the motivation for wanting the work is entirely missing; you focus only on selling a service rather than explaining why you personally want to help her. This lack of personal engagement and failure to adopt the correct persona significantly impacts the task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks proper paragraphing, which is essential for organizing ideas clearly. The text is presented as a single block, making it difficult to follow the progression of information. While there are some cohesive devices used, such as 'If you want' and 'as we are,' the overall structure is mechanical and lacks the logical flow expected in a formal or semi-formal letter. The transition between the introduction and the business pitch is abrupt, and the lack of clear paragraph breaks hinders the reader's ability to navigate the different requirements of the task.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on business-related jargon that is not suitable for this specific task. There are several spelling errors and informal contractions, such as 'wanna' instead of 'want to,' and 'indoextocleaning.com' appears to be a placeholder or error. The use of 'coupe' instead of 'coupon' or 'discount' further demonstrates a lack of precision. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic message, it lacks the range and accuracy required for a higher band score, and the tone is consistently inappropriate for a personal letter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with capitalization (e.g., 'dear, mrs barrett', 'i'), punctuation (e.g., missing periods, comma splices), and sentence structure. For example, 'I recently seen' should be 'I recently saw' or 'I have recently seen.' The phrase 'we will be waiting to your responses' is grammatically incorrect. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and punctuation prevents the text from reaching a higher band. There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures.
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