Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

DEAR Mrs Barrett,

I had seen an advertising of yours over there you given details about you need a worker who help help you at your work . I am intrested to help you .As I had experience of 7 years and qualified by goverment identity . moreover, I can help you in household chores such as cleaning your home , wash utensils , laundary and even cook food for you and also help you on changing clothes or bathing on top of that I would take you out at evening to make you feel refreshed . i loved to do this work because I am qualified and love to take care of others and it makes me feel overwhlemed .Furthermore, i usually work on day time from morning to late night and at night i am not avaialable because i had another shift at another place . I would be waiting for ur reply as my details is ,first name is janak ,contact number is [redacted phone]. you may contact me any time you want ia am there to answer you. I am waiting for your reply .

Thank you .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: suggesting help, explaining the motivation, and stating availability. However, the development is somewhat basic. While you mention household chores and companionship, the tone is slightly informal and repetitive. The explanation of availability is clear, though the phrasing is a bit clunky. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more professional language and a more consistent tone suitable for a formal letter to a potential employer. You have addressed the prompt effectively, but the lack of formal structure and some awkward phrasing limits the depth of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is generally coherent, but the paragraphing is non-existent, which makes the text feel like a single block. While you use some cohesive devices like 'moreover', 'furthermore', and 'on top of that', their usage is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. The progression of ideas is logical, moving from your skills to your motivation and finally to your availability. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks to separate the different sections of the letter and work on using a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'laundary' instead of 'laundry' and 'intrested' instead of 'interested'. You rely on basic vocabulary like 'help' and 'work' repeatedly. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, such as 'refreshed' and 'overwhelmed', the usage is not always precise. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more varied and accurate vocabulary related to household tasks and professional communication, and pay closer attention to spelling accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tenses ('I had seen', 'I had experience'), article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'I am intrested to help you' should be 'I am interested in helping you'. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your sentences are grammatically complete.

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