Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I hope you are doing well. I have writing to you this letter regarding the adviserment. I felt very happy after seeing this.

to commence with,I know many household works. I can help you to manage your home by maintaining its hygiene and cleaniless.Along with this i can you help you in kitchen as well.because i have keen interest in cooking and i also know how to cook most of Italian and Arabic food.

I growed up with my mome and i have learnt many skills and tricks to manage home.futhermore,I also studied home science in my academics which taught me advance level things,However it also help me to build my interest in it.

I am doing applied science as full time student having classes on Monday to Thursday.Thus i can not help you in these days ,Neverthless I am fully available from Wednesday to sunday.I will really love to hear back from you

I beilieve on decision and i really appreciate you for considering my application

Yours Faithfully,

Ravi Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: suggesting help, explaining your motivation, and clarifying your availability. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to an acquaintance. However, there is a significant contradiction in your availability section: you state you cannot help Monday to Thursday, but then claim you are available from Wednesday to Sunday. This inconsistency makes your schedule unclear for the reader. To improve, ensure your ideas are logically consistent and fully developed. The purpose of the letter is clear, and you have maintained a consistent focus on the task requirements throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'to commence with', 'furthermore', and 'thus'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. Additionally, the transition between the second and third paragraphs is a bit abrupt. The logical flow is occasionally hindered by the contradictory information regarding your availability. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that the progression of ideas within and between paragraphs is seamless and logical.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'maintaining its hygiene', 'keen interest', and 'applied science'. However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'adviserment' (advertisement), 'cleaniless' (cleanliness), 'mome' (mom/mother), and 'futhermore' (furthermore). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning. To improve, focus on proofreading for spelling accuracy and expanding your range of collocations related to household tasks and professional communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I have writing to you' (I am writing to you), 'I growed up' (I grew up), 'it also help me' (it also helped me), and 'I beilieve on decision' (I believe in your decision). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. While the meaning remains clear, the high frequency of errors in basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement limits your score. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency.

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