Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

dear mrs, barrett

I hope you are doing great. while scrolling the reels on instagram, seen advertisement saying you are finding someone to help in. i wanna inform you that i am proffesional indoor and outdoor house cleaner, doing from last 3 years for living. I will love to do that for you as i like helping people to make there surroundings clean. I do jobs in area nearby metrotown vancouver at very affordable price. Please book an appointment with me as soon as possible because it is hard to ve available on spot. I can work monday to friday 7am to 5 pm what ever suits you as saturday and sunday i am unavailable as it is my family time.

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your faithfull

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suggesting help, explaining the motivation, and detailing availability. However, the tone is inconsistent and overly informal for a letter to a stranger (e.g., 'wanna', 'doing great'). The development of ideas is somewhat thin; for instance, the explanation of why you want the work is limited to 'i like helping people'. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your skills and provide a more professional justification for your interest in the position, while maintaining a formal tone appropriate for a business-related enquiry.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is generally coherent, but the paragraphing is non-existent, which makes the text feel like a single block of information. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the specific details, the lack of clear paragraph breaks hinders the flow. Cohesive devices are used, but they are quite basic (e.g., 'For more', 'Please'). To improve, you should use clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, the body points, and the closing, and incorporate a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and contains several informal or non-standard expressions, such as 'wanna' and 'doing from last 3 years'. There are also spelling errors like 'proffesional' and 'faithfull'. While the meaning is clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should focus on using more precise, professional terminology and ensure correct spelling to enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('help in'), incorrect verb tenses ('doing from last 3 years'), and punctuation issues (e.g., 'dear mrs, barrett'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence variety. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. You need to focus on subject-verb agreement, proper punctuation, and using a wider variety of complex sentence structures.

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