Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.
Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter
- suggest how you could help her in her home
- say why you would like to do this work
- explain when you will and will not be available
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Mrs Barrett,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Mrs. Barret,
Letter to inform about my availability to help you in here home to ready a public speech.
As I have a keen interest in Environmental studies, so, I would like to offer you a help regarding your speech in hometown assembly on June, 5th. In addition to this, advertisement that you have been published about environment issues influence me to take part in this.
Moving further, doing voluntering on environment day help to get some crucial knowledge about different aspects of environment and their laws. Thus, it will help me to boost my theoretical and practical parts of my studies that later on help me achieve good score.
Lastly, I had summer vacations in the june, so, I will be available on first week of the june to provide help regarding your speech on Environment day. Additionally, I will provide some quotes, banners and poster regarding environmental issues that is happening arround the world.
I would like to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Rajpreet Kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points, though the content is somewhat misaligned with the prompt. The prompt asks for help in the home (e.g., cleaning, cooking, gardening), but you focus exclusively on helping with a speech about the environment. While this is relevant to the topic, it ignores the 'help in her home' aspect. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening is slightly awkward as you address the recipient as 'Mrs. Barret' instead of 'Dear Mrs. Barrett' as requested. To improve, ensure you directly address the specific nature of the help requested in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition to this', 'Moving further', and 'Lastly' to transition between points. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused in context. The progression of ideas is logical, but the connection between your desire to help with a speech and the requirement to help 'in her home' remains a point of confusion. Improving the flow between sentences would help the text feel more natural.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'theoretical', 'practical', and 'environmental issues'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'to ready a public speech' (instead of 'to prepare') and 'doing voluntering' (instead of 'volunteering'). There are also minor spelling errors like 'arround' and 'june' (which should be capitalized). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of common terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'As I have a keen interest... so, I would like...' is redundant; you should use either 'As...' or 'So...'. Other issues include 'advertisement that you have been published' (passive voice error) and 'I had summer vacations' (tense inconsistency, as you are referring to a future event). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors limits the score.
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