Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Rajveer,

I hope this letter finds you pink of your health. The reason behind writing this letter is to thank you for whatever you did, when I stay with you last week.

I know how you manage your schedule from your busy life to help me. Today, only because of you I got my enrollment letter from the job I applied for. During the visit, you taught me how to give interviews and questions related to what they ask. It helped me alot during my interview. Before, I didn't get the chance to tell you; however, now I am telling you via this letter.

I vividly remember the night we spend on your city. we visited the club and had dance with a glass of vine. After that we went to the well known restaurant of your city, that was the amazing time I felt.

I want to invite you in my hometown, and we will visit the prominent places here and spend a good time.

Hope to see you soon.

With love,

Akash

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt required a letter to Mrs Barrett regarding a job advertisement for home help, but the student wrote a personal letter to a friend named Rajveer about a past visit and a job interview. Because the student failed to address any of the bullet points or the intended recipient, the task has not been fulfilled.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

While the letter is structured into paragraphs and uses basic cohesive devices like 'however' and 'after that', the logical progression is irrelevant to the task instructions. The paragraphing is sufficient for a letter format, but the lack of relevance to the prompt makes the overall coherence ineffective in the context of the examination.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in collocation and word choice, such as 'pink of your health' (instead of 'pink of health'), 'stay with you' (tense error), and 'glass of vine' (spelling error for 'wine'). The range is basic and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'when I stay with you' (should be 'stayed'), 'Today, only because of you I got' (awkward syntax), 'the night we spend' (should be 'spent'), and 'had dance' (should be 'danced'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic tenses and sentence structure limits the score.

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