Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear mrs Barrett,

How is the family and work,hope my letter meet you well? am writing in respect to your advert requesting for a maid for a job in your apartment daily for limited numbers of hours.

As a student, I presume this is a better opportunity for meto earn a token at the end of month, so as to custion some of expenses in school.As learner in a college, there are many things to do at a stretch and at any point of your responsibility as a student money is involved as such an in dividual that parents or guadiance with income like would need some support the token from home.

i appreciate if am previlege to have this job because i really need it to help myself in school, presently there so many textbooks i am yet to purchase due to lack of finance, with this engagement i shoud be able to sort out some of my ppressing needs in my department.

because I am atten ding classes on working days my work is going on weekends saturdays and sundays.

I anticipate for a favourable response.

yours faithfully,

mr james john.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student has successfully covered all parts of the prompt. They suggest how they can help in Mrs Barrett's home by offering to assist as a daily helper for a limited number of hours. They clearly state why they would like to do the work, explaining that they need money to purchase textbooks and cover school expenses. Furthermore, they explain their availability by noting that because they attend classes on working days, they are only available on weekends (Saturdays and Sundays). The tone is appropriately polite for a letter to an acquaintance, and the ideas are extended sufficiently to meet the task requirements. Therefore, this criterion meets the standard for a solid band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing in places, and some sentences run together or lack appropriate punctuation, such as "As a student, I presume this is a better opportunity for meto earn a token..." There are attempts to use cohesive devices like "As a student" and "because", but referencing is occasionally unclear or clunky, as seen in "so as to custion some of expenses in school." The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving from the purpose of the letter to the motivation and finally to availability, but the overall organization and mechanical control of cohesion require more polish to achieve a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling. Examples include "meto" (me to), "custion" (cushion), "guadiance" (guardians), "previlege" (privileged), and "ppressing" (oppressing). While the writer attempts some less common phrases like "lack of finance" and "favourable response," the frequent spelling and word-formation errors occasionally strain the reader and indicate a limited and minimally adequate lexical range for this task level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but it is heavily impacted by frequent grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and poor punctuation. For instance, the opening sentence contains a comma splice ("How is the family and work,hope my letter meet you well?") and agreement issues ("hope my letter meet"). Additionally, capitalization and spacing are erratic throughout the text, as seen in "i appreciate if am previlege" and "atten ding". While the meaning is generally retrievable, the high frequency of errors prevents the grammar from reaching a higher band.

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