Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement regarding the need for a helper for your home. I am a student with Australian nationality, and efficient in english language so it will be convenient to have a conversation with you. I can help in your regular household chores, organizing your home, and assisting your children in their studies. Currently, I am pursuing post graduation in sciences which enables me to help your kids in making projects and assignments.

I am a certified home science student so I love to manage the interior with eye-catching hand made items, and this job will definitely help me to polish my talent. Moreover, I need work to meet my academic as well as my personal expenses.

While the college keeps me busy for 6 days a week from morning 8:00 to 1:00, I can manage the working hours in the evening from 4:00 to 9:00. As my almost whole week is occupied so I need a sunday off for my personal space.

Hoping you to find me suitable for your requirement, and looking for your prompt response.

Yours sincerely,

Pratibha Sharma

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The candidate has successfully covered all three bullet points required in the prompt. First, she suggests how she can help in Mrs Barrett's home by mentioning regular household chores, organizing, and assisting children with their studies and projects. Second, she provides reasons why she wants to do this work, namely to polish her talent as a home science student and to meet academic and personal expenses. Third, she clearly explains her availability, specifying weekday evenings from 4:00 to 9:00 and requesting Sundays off due to college commitments. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to an individual, and the purpose is clear throughout. The response addresses all aspects of the task well, meeting the criteria for a Band 7.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter exhibits a clear logical progression from the opening statement of purpose to the specific tasks, reasons, and finally availability. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate distinct ideas, such as introduction and duties in the first paragraph, motivations in the second, and availability in the third. Cohesive devices are used adequately, with connectors like 'Moreover' and 'While' helping to structure the response. However, referencing and transitions are at times slightly mechanical, such as 'As my almost whole week is occupied so I need a sunday off', which pulls the score down slightly. Overall, the organizational structure is clear and easy to follow, aligning well with the descriptors for a Band 6.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

The student demonstrates an adequate and generally appropriate range of vocabulary for the task. Less common lexical items are attempted, such as 'efficient in english language', 'post graduation', 'eye-catching', and 'academic expenses'. While these phrases communicate the intended meaning clearly, there are some minor lexical and collocational inaccuracies, such as saying 'efficient in english language' instead of 'proficient in English' and 'making projects' rather than 'working on projects'. Spelling and word choices do not impede communication, showing sufficient flexibility and precision to meet the requirements of a Band 6.5 score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating control over relative clauses and conditional ideas, as seen in 'which enables me to help your kids' and 'While the college keeps me busy'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing throughout, such as 'I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement regarding the need for a helper' (slightly wordy), 'efficient in english language' (missing article), and 'As my almost whole week is occupied so I need a sunday off' (redundant use of 'As' and 'so'). Punctuation is generally fine, but minor slips occur. Because these errors do not impede communication and a mix of structures is present, the performance fits the Band 6.0 descriptors.

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