Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Mr Barrett,

I am writing you about assessment. I watched your advertise on Tv 2days ago.

Firstly, I could helped in your house work. I saw your advertise and I want help you in your home cleaning, cooking and wash laundry. when I help you then i feel very happy because it is marked in human category.

Secondly, Two days Ago I saw your advertise on social media. You told about your health issues. Your physical fitness is not good. You can't to do work. Some body pain and headache problems with you. When watched then i decide work in your home. You can't worried about it because I help you in your home work or home management.

Finally, I realise you I help in daily morning time. I can't available everytime because I also do part time job in hospital. I have go there. So i can't available on evening or night time. So I oppologise with you for everytime present.

your's faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main points by offering help with cleaning, cooking and laundry, explaining that you want to help because Mrs Barrett has health problems, and giving some information about your availability. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: the reason for wanting the work is not clearly personal or developed, and the availability is vague. “Daily morning time” does not specify which days or hours, while the evening and night restriction is clearer. The letter also begins “Dear Mr Barrett” rather than using the requested name and ends with an incomplete sign-off. To strengthen the response, explain your motivation more directly and give precise times and days when you can and cannot work.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a basic structure, and “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Finally” signal the main sections. The reader can generally identify your offer, your comments about Mrs Barrett’s health, and your availability. However, progression is not always clear: the advertisement is mentioned twice, and the second paragraph repeats the offer of help rather than developing a distinct reason for wanting the job. Some links are difficult to follow, such as “When watched then i decide work in your home,” and the final availability point is not clearly separated from the apology. Use one paragraph for each task point, avoid repeating information, and connect ideas with clear references and complete linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “cleaning,” “cooking,” “laundry,” “part time job,” and “availability.” These words help communicate the general offer. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “assessment” for the reason for writing, “human category,” “your advertise,” and “home management.” Spelling and form errors such as “oppologise” and “advertise” also reduce clarity. Aim for natural phrases suited to a formal letter, such as “I saw your advertisement,” “I would be pleased to help,” and “household chores.” Check spelling and choose expressions that convey your intended meaning precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses such as “because” and “when,” but the range of sentence structures is limited, and many sentences contain errors that make the reader work to understand them. Examples include “I could helped,” “I want help you,” “You can't to do work,” and “I can't available,” where verb forms and sentence patterns are not controlled. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “when” beginning a sentence and “i” throughout. Practise accurate basic patterns first: “I could help with…,” “I would like to help because…,” and “I am available in the mornings, but I cannot work in the evenings.” Then add longer sentences only when you can control their grammar.

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