Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter

• suggest how you could help her in her home
• say why you would like to do this work
• explain when you will and will not be available

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mrs Barrett,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mrs Barrett,

How are you? I hope everything is going well with you.I am writing to response you to after seeing an advertisement on newspapper regarding your need for caretaker in coming summer.

I would like to show my interest regarding this short-term vacancy in your house.Recently I completed my health care course in geriatric nursing .I would like to join this at your house if you are agree with this.I can do everything to assist you in your basic care to advance services.However,I can do all your medication , assisting you in you daily life activities and also i can helps you in excercise .

I would really want to do this ,because I am free in next summer for my research work.I have to complete my research thoroughly .I believe this would be great opportunity for me as well as for you since I do my job with responsibility.I can make sure you ,you will feel better and well when I assist you in your day to day activities.

I would also informd you about my schedule in adnvance before joining job at your home to prevent from any inconvenience to you.Here , I can tell you in brief that I am unable to work on Sunday because I will complete my research data on this day.Otherwise I will be available everyday at flexible time .

Please let me know about you thought on this .

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Param

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you offer help with medication, daily activities and exercise; explain that the work would fit around your research; and state that you cannot work on Sundays but are otherwise available. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The care you can provide is the most specific part, while your reason for wanting the job is less fully explained: being free for research does not clearly show why this particular work appeals to you. Availability is also somewhat vague because “flexible time” does not give Mrs Barrett a likely daily schedule. Develop these points with a clearer personal motivation and specific hours to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall shape, with separate paragraphs for your interest and skills, your reason for applying, and your availability. The sequence is easy to follow, and the closing is appropriate. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. For example, “I am free in next summer for my research work” is followed by “I have to complete my research thoroughly,” which makes the reason for taking the job difficult to follow. The transition “However” does not introduce a contrast before the list of care duties. Improve the progression by explaining how the job fits alongside your research, and use linking words only when their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “geriatric nursing,” “medication,” “daily life activities” and “research data,” so the reader can understand your intended skills and circumstances. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, but several word choices, collocations and spelling errors reduce naturalness: “caretaker” may suggest a different role from home-care assistance, while “newspapper,” “excercise” and “adnvance” are misspelled. Phrases such as “do everything to assist you” and “do my job with responsibility” are vague or unnatural. Aim for precise, conventional expressions for care duties and availability, and proofread spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because” and a conditional phrase in “if you are agree with this.” The main message remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries are noticeable. For example, “I am writing to response you” has an incorrect verb pattern, “I can helps” has faulty agreement, and “I would also informd you” uses an incorrect verb form. There are also missing spaces after full stops and commas, which affect punctuation. Practise accurate patterns such as “I am writing in response to…” and check each sentence for a correctly formed verb and clear punctuation.

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