Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment.

What damage does plastic do to the environment?

What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

writing Task 2

Non-biodegradable products has become serious problem in this modern era. Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are putting the environment into risk. There are some bad affects of these but solution still exist and I will discuss both in the impending paragraph.

On the one hand, there are some bad serious problems that are occured because of plastic. Firstly plastic is non-biodegradable. To explain it, these days a large amount of plastic is used for distinct purposes like for bags and bottles, but after used these has been thrown in the garbage tanks. As a result companies have to burn this to finish it and it produces dangers gases into the atmosphere that is not only do bad for

humans , but also for other

Nature creatures.

On the other hand, a number

of steps can be taken by

the authorities and individual

Government can encourages

people through the advertisem

and social media platforms.

To elaborate it, officials

can hire celebrities to promote

the alternatives of plastic.

As a result people who

influence from the heros,

they can be stop the

using of plastic. Moreover,

government can also impose

fines on companies and

organisation who makes these

things so that it can

be reduced in the

market.

In conclusion, plastic damaging

the environment by

increasing air pollution in

the air, but it can be

tackled by government through imposing fines and other steps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the environmental damage caused by plastic and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is limited. The explanation of environmental damage is brief and lacks depth, and the solutions provided are somewhat generic. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the arguments. The conclusion is also quite repetitive of the introduction. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific examples and ensure you meet the word count to allow for a more comprehensive discussion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To explain it' and 'To elaborate it'. The transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, and the logical flow within paragraphs is hindered by grammatical errors. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive nature of the arguments make the progression feel somewhat disjointed. Improving the variety of linking phrases would help the ideas connect more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'dangers gases', 'nature creatures', and 'influence from the heros'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'impending paragraph' (which is not the correct context for this phrase). To achieve a higher score, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary related to environmental issues and ensure that words are used in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('products has become', 'these has been thrown'), incorrect verb forms ('are occured', 'who makes these things'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction before attempting more complex grammatical structures. Proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency is essential.

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