Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion.

Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter

• say which points in the article you agree with
• explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres
• offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter about a recent article that I read in a newspaper, which claimed that our Town looks similar as other towns.so, according to your new, s i am agree with some points or disagree with others

Well according to your report i am convinced that same as other villages less health facilities and markets . But , our Town has a famous temple of Anciet times as well a fair coin poind not only this But also it is also known as a village of fish market . because here a large fish market which is famous for salmon fish . as well , recently our village get a new ma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the required points. While you attempted to address the three bullet points, the ideas are underdeveloped and the letter ends abruptly mid-sentence. To improve, you must ensure each point is fully expanded with supporting details. For example, the explanation of why your town is unique is fragmented and lacks clarity. Because the response is 33 words short and incomplete, it does not fully address the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of periods and capitalization. The abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of the text. To improve, you should organize your letter into clear paragraphs: one for the introduction, one for each bullet point, and a concluding sentence. Using transition words like 'furthermore,' 'however,' or 'consequently' would help connect your ideas more logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Anciet' instead of 'ancient' and 'poind' instead of 'pond'. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'our village get a new ma'. You rely on basic vocabulary, which prevents you from expressing your ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more varied and accurate vocabulary related to town features and descriptive adjectives to better illustrate your points.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'our village get'), incorrect sentence structure, and missing articles. The use of complex sentences is attempted but often results in errors, such as the misuse of 'not only this But also'. Punctuation is also a significant issue, with random capitalization and incorrect sentence boundaries. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on consistent punctuation.

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