Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion.

Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter

• say which points in the article you agree with
• explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres
• offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Jack,

I am writing this email in responsed to your recent observation regarding our main attraction of the city which is twin tower center, However, i am totally agree with the facts that say's the towers were made with original white stone. Not only this but newspaper also mentioned that insite design of the building were made by well-known architecture which is true.

However, I noticed you believe that our city attraction looks very alike to another country's towns which i completley disagree with because the drawings in the building were made by labours themselves and not by a proffesionals. Talking about different town centres many of the crafts in other buildings done by proffesionals which is totally unlike. Furthermore, I feel that you should visit our downtown to see the town centre by yourself and afterwards you get to know whether it is smilar to other centres or not for the smooth travel follow yellow sign from the main street so you can reach their easily.

I look forward to your response.

Yours sincerely,

Suhani Jingar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You attempt all three bullet points: you identify details from the article that you accept, explain why you disagree with its comparison, and invite the writer to visit. However, the response only minimally fulfils the task because the points are not consistently clear or sufficiently developed. The article’s claim about similar town centres is addressed, but the explanation that local building drawings were made by labourers is difficult to connect to how the town centre differs from most others. The guided-tour offer is also weakened by unclear directions and no clear arrangement for personally showing the town. In addition, the task specifies “Dear Sir or Madam,” whereas you address “Dear Jack.” Make the comparison explicit and give a clear, personal tour invitation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter has a basic overall shape, with an opening paragraph, a paragraph explaining your disagreement, and a closing. Linking expressions such as “However,” “Furthermore,” and “I look forward to your response” help signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression is difficult to follow in places: the first paragraph moves from the towers’ stone to their interior design, while the next shifts to drawings and other buildings without clearly connecting these details to the claim about similar town centres. The long sentence beginning “Furthermore, I feel…” combines the invitation, a condition, and directions, making the message hard to track. Use clearer paragraph purposes and separate the tour offer from practical directions; make references such as “which” and “there” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “main attraction,” “original white stone,” “interior design,” and “guided” ideas about visiting the town. This gives you enough language to communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning unclear. For example, “our main attraction of the city” is awkward, and “drawings in the building” does not clearly identify the feature that makes the centre distinctive. There are also spelling errors such as “completley,” “proffesionals,” and “smilar,” alongside the incorrect form “insite.” Choose precise terms for the town’s distinctive features and check spelling and natural combinations of words before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “I am writing…” and the clause beginning “because the drawings…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the message difficult to understand. Examples include “I am totally agree” (use “I totally agree”), “the inside design … were made” (the subject is singular), and “many of the crafts … done” (the verb is missing). The sentence beginning “for the smooth travel” is also joined awkwardly to the preceding invitation. Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, particularly the lowercase “i” and the comma before “However.” Practise accurate basic clauses first, then build longer sentences with clear subjects and verbs.

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