Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion.

Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter

• say which points in the article you agree with
• explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres
• offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir or madam,

Today, I am writing this letter to acknowledge you to many different facilities we have in our town centre which doesn't has in the nearest town. You have compared our town with all other town but I think you did some mistake according to your article.

Firstly, I agree with you transportation point which we have similarity with others. Also with hospital and education facilities we provided the same way to public.

I like to introduce some new facilities of our town. First, we have hospital in which all doctors are well-known and we have all new technological treatments provided to patients. We have best cleaning system by which our public area keeps clean and tidy. so, our illness ratio of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify one point of agreement—transport, hospitals and education are similar—and begin to describe differences, including doctors’ expertise, modern treatments and cleanliness. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the differences are not clearly contrasted with other towns, and the final point about the town’s illness rate is cut off. Most importantly, you do not offer the article’s writer a guided tour, so one required bullet is missing. The letter also ends before its ideas are completed. The response is 125 words, below the required 150, which limits the opportunity to develop the points. To improve, cover all three bullets explicitly and add specific examples before closing the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the letter: an opening, a paragraph beginning “Firstly” for points of agreement, and another beginning “I like to introduce” for differences. These markers help the reader follow the broad direction. However, progression is incomplete because the response stops mid-sentence at “our illness ratio of,” and there is no closing or guided-tour paragraph. Some links are also mechanical or unclear: “Also with hospital and education facilities” does not connect smoothly to the previous sentence, while “First” repeats the earlier sequencing. Use complete paragraphs for agreement, distinctive features and the invitation, and connect each idea with clear, natural transitions. This would make the overall organisation more coherent and the relationships between points easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “transportation,” “facilities,” “technological treatments,” and “clean and tidy.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “acknowledge you to many different facilities,” “you did some mistake,” and “our illness ratio.” Repetition of “town,” “facilities” and “we have” also restricts variety. Aim for more precise phrases such as “draw your attention to,” “there may be a misunderstanding,” and “the rate of illness.” You could also use specific terms for local features, such as “historic market,” “independent shops” or “community health services,” rather than relying on general claims about facilities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its main ideas through mostly simple sentence patterns, and there is an attempt to use a relative clause in “by which our public area keeps clean and tidy.” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and agreement occur often enough to make some parts difficult to follow. For example, “which doesn't has in the nearest town” has an incorrect verb form and an incomplete structure; “You have compared our town with all other town” has a number-agreement problem; and “our public area keeps clean” needs a different grammatical construction. The final sentence is unfinished, which also affects clarity. Practise complete clauses, subject–verb agreement, articles and plural forms, and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb before moving on.

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