Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In contemperory world, It is common debate among young generation about keeping pete animals is benifical for toddlers or not. In this essay will discuss both negative and positive impact on children for having pet animals.
There are multiple favorable aspects of having pet. First and foremost is pet animals such as dogs, cats, perrorits etc. These animals are mostly have friendly and collabrative behavour and along with they have capicity to mix with family members. These pets can become good friends of children while playing as well as protecting them, in the absence of the parents. Thus pets can become the other guiden for children in term of safety. Secondly, Pet are the creature who consider as the leegal towards their owner
Mostly in the family pet like dog who consider a loyal animal always become easily familar with family members. If children play with dogs they feel so excited and overenjoyed while play. Not only children learn friendly nature as well as learn how love, while closely playing with them. For instance in western countries always have pet in their home, whom they consider family and treat as the another part of family member. Consequently, pets can servers protection, loyality and become good for toddlers.
On the other hand, some people argue to have pets at home because of safety and health concern for children. The reason behind this, some time animal can get eggitated and triggered by sometime such as detrimental smell or awkward place. These situation can make them aggressive and uncontrollable. In this circumstance leaving children with pet can dangerous because of the unpredictable behaviour. In addition health issue is another concern, animals such as cat, dogs have different smell, and have their hair by chance go into toddlers mouth or if they may have any allergies of anything, might prove hamful for their health. For example, in western contries so
Mostly in the family pet like dog always become easy family children play with and overenjoyed friendly
Cases admitted and ailment come out because of alcrigers from certain animals.
In my opinion, pet are best friend of the human and bes proven proven bemifical for children as well but parent should admit it before contacting to near the children that ; petr are fully vacinated and toddlers dont have any certain allergies.
In conclusion, although in some situation pets can behave harshly but it is parents responsibilities to make sure their pets are fully vacinated and safe for childrens to play. Than the dangerou impact like alergies or harm can be control
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks to discuss the attitudes of people who like trying new things versus those who prefer familiarity. Instead, the essay discusses the pros and cons of keeping pets for children. Because the response fails to address the task prompt entirely, it cannot be assessed for task achievement in relation to the specific question asked. While the writer attempts to present arguments, they are irrelevant to the topic provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely hampered by the lack of relevance to the prompt. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First and foremost' and 'On the other hand', but they connect irrelevant ideas. There is significant repetition of phrases, and some sentences are fragmented or incomplete, such as 'For example, in western contries so' and the disjointed lines following it, which disrupts the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors in spelling and word choice, such as 'contemperory', 'pete animals', 'perrorits', 'collabrative', and 'leegal'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. Many words are misused, such as 'guiden' for 'guide' or 'servers' for 'serve'. These errors often impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. There are frequent errors in basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and article usage (e.g., 'In contemperory world', 'Pet are the creature'). Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incoherent, particularly in the latter half of the essay. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further complicates the readability of the text.
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