Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.
Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
in this concurrent world few mortls prefer to explore new things like new place and cousins while other thinks keep doing same things as familiar .I will discuss both point of view along with my opinion in upcoming paragraph with logical conclusion
In the favour of former view which illustrates explore new things is really good. Firstly, mortals gets more knowledge about new culture and festivals. To elaborate it, while visiting new places mortals get chance to intract with new persons who gives them information about their culture which helps in spread thier festivals and more people get know about them also while travelling they get various tyoe of food which also gives them more information taste of foods and choices of people. cosequently, mortals get knowlegde about various festivals and cousins
In the favour of latter view which justify that continue to doing their familiar things is better in the terms of they get chance to boost their realation with their family members. to be more clear, while doing their family things their family member also take part in that and mortals get knowledge about their mistakes for example people celebrating
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 192 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument and state an opinion, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting examples. The conclusion is missing entirely, and the argument remains superficial. To improve, you must expand your points with specific, detailed examples and ensure you provide a clear, well-supported conclusion that synthesizes your position. The current length prevents a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'In the favour of', but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between visiting new places and 'spread thier festivals' is confusing. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is incomplete and lacks a concluding sentence. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by logical, connected supporting points.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling. For example, you use 'mortls' (mortals) incorrectly throughout the text; 'people' or 'individuals' would be appropriate. You also use 'cousins' when you clearly mean 'cuisines'. Other errors include 'intract' (interact) and 'realation' (relationship). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. You should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary related to travel, culture, and personal habits to improve precision and clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There are frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('mortals gets'), incorrect word forms ('continue to doing'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete, such as the final sentence which trails off. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and capitalization errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.
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