Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

People have different views regarding some people try to new thing some people like familiar with. i suggest that both are impoetant i think because some people like diffrent new places to explore. some diffrent new food try. people also known for the new places some new excitement new experience is the most important for our mind because new place also known his history more new placses and more new experience now this is a very important for humansome new idea some new history to explore

Some people can also trying diffrent food because new taste new idea how it can be prepare in home because this type of new food also intrested in home special for children now all in all new food and placses are more explore and more experience.

some other people prefer to keep doing to familiar with because they not intrested in some new places because they only like to old and well known placese and they are very happy whith old placese more and more explore because they more happy whith old and very well known places also people like some try n tested food because they more happy whith old food because this kind of food they very well known his taste and they are happy with old taste also they know his advantages his body benefit .then they try to old food they not try to new food rather than old now all both point his place good and beautiful all in all both experience are good.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt by discussing both attitudes towards trying new things versus sticking to the familiar, and it briefly mentions a personal viewpoint at the beginning by stating 'i suggest that both are impoetant'. However, the ideas are severely underdeveloped and lack clear elaboration or relevant examples. Much of the content consists of repetitive statements about food and places without offering deep insight or structured arguments. The reasoning remains surface-level, such as mentioning that 'new experience is the most important for our mind'. Consequently, the task response aligns best with a Band 4.5 or 5.0, as it touches upon the prompt but struggles with adequate development and clarity of ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into three paragraphs, which visually attempts to follow an introduction-body structure, but the internal organization lacks logical progression and clarity. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with phrases like 'now all in all' and 'then they try' creating awkward transitions. Paragraphing is faulty, as sentences run together in a disorganized stream of consciousness without clear signposting. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of arguments. Overall, the structural flaws and lack of effective cohesion place this writing firmly at a Band 4.0 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical resource is very basic and repetitive. Throughout the text, the writer relies heavily on simple, high-frequency words such as 'new', 'places', 'food', and 'happy', repeating them numerous times. There is a lack of less common vocabulary or idiomatic expressions, and spelling errors are frequent throughout the response, including 'impoetant', 'diffrent', 'intrested', and 'whith'. Word choice and collocations are often inaccurate, such as 'try n tested food' or 'his body benefit'. These frequent errors and the narrow vocabulary range reflect the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of short, poorly structured, and repetitive simple sentences connected loosely. There is a complete absence of accurate complex structures. Punctuation is largely neglected, resulting in run-on sentences and a lack of capitalization at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'i suggest'). Frequent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and word forms—such as 'some people try to new thing' and 'because they not intrested'—distort meaning and strain the reader. This level of grammatical control corresponds to a Band 4.0.

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