Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is often argued that people like to try new things for example places , this attitude is very interesting specially for young people. They always ready to observe for new places . This is because some time new things give new experience. If we are visit the Hill station in Murree. we prefer to stay familiar place . According to my experience change is more better rather then famiIiar because every point have their own facilities and views. Public can more enjoy with visit new places but on the other hand food is relay able if you would not to try different places. Furthermore, person can not tolerate such type of experience. Specially for adult or patient, which are having problem for food

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response touches on both attitudes: it mentions trying new places and experiences, then notes that familiar food may feel more reliable and that some people may not tolerate unfamiliar experiences. It also gives a personal preference for change. However, the discussion is minimal and the position is not developed with clear reasons or relevant examples; the Murree reference is difficult to interpret and does not explain either attitude. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words: it contains 115 words, with 9 words copied from the prompt excluded. To improve, explain why people seek novelty and why others value familiarity, then support each point with a specific example and state your opinion clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to connect ideas using phrases such as “This is because,” “According to my experience,” and “on the other hand.” These show an awareness that the essay needs explanation and contrast. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear progression, and the response has no paragraphing to separate the two attitudes and the writer’s view. Some links are confusing: the sentence about visiting Murree shifts abruptly to preferring a familiar place, while the contrast about food is not clearly connected to the earlier point about travel. Organise the response into an introduction, separate discussion paragraphs, and a conclusion, and make each linking phrase express a clear relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small range of topic-related vocabulary, including “new experience,” “familiar,” “facilities,” “views,” and “tolerate.” These words help communicate the general subject, but vocabulary is basic and several choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “relay able” appears to mean “reliable,” and “more better” is not an appropriate expression for the intended comparison. “Hill station” and “patient” are also used in ways that do not clearly support the argument. Build a more precise set of words for novelty and familiarity, and check spelling and collocations so that your ideas are easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “This is because” and a contrast introduced by “but on the other hand.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently interrupt the message. Examples include “They always ready” (missing a verb), “If we are visit” (incorrect verb form), and “every point have” (subject–verb disagreement). Several sentence boundaries are also unclear, such as the full stop after “Murree.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses. Check that each sentence has a subject and verb and that punctuation clearly separates complete ideas.

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