Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.
Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter
- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other peopleYou do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to provide my feedback on the the book which inspired me a lot in terms of patience and self believe.
The book name "Eleven faces" written by william shakespear. I read this book approximately two months ago. The book story mainly reloves around the two main character a monther and his five year old son. The story through the light on the special bond shared by mother and his son.
The second chapter influenced me the most because in this lesson a child who was unable to walk always remain stressfull. His mother than encourage the child, and became his strength by motivating the child with postive thoughts and helping him to walk slowly on regular basis without loosing hope. The way lady inspired his boy to be consistence and determined towards his job inspired me a lot.
Definately, this book would inspire a large amount of individuals, who really want to achive some goals in their life, but unable due to the lack of self confidence and puntuality. The moral of the story, which is focused, confident and consistency will leave a significant impact on ones life.
kind regards,
Kajal Kumari
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
You address all three points: you identify the book, describe the mother’s support for her son, explain that this story strengthened your patience and self-belief, and say it could encourage people pursuing goals. The account of the second chapter gives the letter a relevant personal focus. However, some details are unclear or not fully developed: the title and author are introduced abruptly, and the description of the book’s wider story is brief. Your prediction about its effect on “a large amount of individuals” is also quite general. To strengthen the response, clarify the book’s central message and give a specific example of how its lesson changed your own behaviour or could affect a particular kind of reader.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: an opening purpose is followed by the book’s story, its personal influence, and a concluding view about its effect on others. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “The second chapter” and “Definitely” guide the reader through the ideas. Some connections are less smooth, however. The transition from the book’s general plot to the chapter’s events is abrupt, and repeated references to “the child” and “the book” make parts of the account feel mechanical. The closing also moves quickly from the moral to the sign-off. Use clearer links between the plot and your personal response, and make references more precise so the progression feels more natural.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant vocabulary to discuss the book’s themes and influence, including “special bond,” “motivating,” “determined,” and “self confidence.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, as in “reloves,” “stressfull,” “consistence,” “achive,” and “puntuality.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the story through the light on” and “in terms of patience and self believe.” Choose more accurate collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, you could say the story “sheds light on” the bond, and describe the lesson as building “self-belief and perseverance.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the sentence explaining how the mother encourages her son and helps him walk. The main message remains understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. Examples include “The book name ‘Eleven faces’ written by…” (a sentence fragment), “the two main character,” and “his mother” when referring to the boy’s mother. Verb forms and sentence construction also need attention in “His mother than encourage the child” and “who was unable to walk always remain stressfull.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause to work out the intended meaning. Practise forming complete sentences, maintaining subject–verb agreement and consistent past-tense narration, and checking articles and pronoun references.
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