Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir ,

I hope you are fine. I am writing this letter to about a recently read the book. It book name is 'influenced me most.' Yesterday i am free i while the read book. This book very interesting and encourage the people. During the read book i feel very relax and book give the more knowledge.

This book very interesting and some influenced on me. Because this book give a knowlegde about a histroical and traditioanl religious. Book writer name a abdual clam. He all book more knowledge about a traditioanl culture and encourage will be future.

I would be like this book and me say other people read the book because this book influenced on other people and encourage the people. so i suggest other people read the book. because improve a vacublory and skills.

Hoping a prompt response.

Yours faithfully,

Jaspreet Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to cover all three points: you mention the book’s subject, its effect on you, and whether others might benefit. However, the response only minimally fulfils the task because the book is not clearly identified: “influenced me most” appears as its title, while “a historical and traditional religious” does not explain what it is about. The writer’s name and the influence on you are also difficult to understand, and the claim that it improves vocabulary and skills is not explained. The response is 146 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 150. Add a clear title and a few specific details about the book and how it changed your thinking or behaviour; explain why other readers might respond similarly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable format, with a greeting, three body paragraphs, and a closing. The paragraphs broadly correspond to introducing the book, describing its influence, and recommending it to others, which gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are repeated or left incomplete, such as “This book very interesting” and “this book influenced on other people.” Linking words such as “Because” and “so” are used, but they do not always connect complete, clear ideas. Improve the flow by giving each paragraph one clear purpose, using complete sentences, and referring to the book consistently as “it” after naming it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “influenced,” “knowledge,” “historical,” “traditional,” and “encourage,” so the general topic is apparent. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make the meaning unclear. For example, “a historical and traditional religious” does not name a clear subject, while “improve a vacublory” appears to mean improving vocabulary. There are also spelling errors such as “knowlegde,” “histroical,” and “traditioanl.” Build a more precise range for describing books and their effects, and check spelling and collocations. For instance, explain whether the book taught you about a particular period, culture, or religious tradition rather than relying on broad labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts a few longer sentences, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning hard to recover. Examples include “I am writing this letter to about a recently read the book,” “Yesterday i am free i while the read book,” and “Book writer name a abdual clam.” These show problems with sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and word order. Subject–verb agreement and tense are also inconsistent, as in “book give” and “Yesterday i am.” Use a reliable basic pattern—subject, verb, and object—and keep past-tense verbs for events that happened while reading. Practise joining ideas with “because” only when both parts form complete clauses.

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