Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

dear sir

i hope u are doing well i am also good . there are many book which influence .but, healthy life style is book which mostly influence me and. book has various of exercise and recipe of of healty food meanwhile there are many books which tells about exercise but campare with other books this book tell all exercise with brief detail and in easy ways.

this book also influence me because i am also dealing with health issuse such as , obesity as a result by reading this book i learn several way of exerice but most important. that is benefit of eating healthy diet .

this book also influence other individuals because thesedays peaple mostly do exercise but this book also tells importants of nutrition and diet manytimes forgets value of good diet.

mostimportant , there are many tricks to aviod eating outside and side effects are slso me

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your sinecerly

dilpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three requested points: you identify the book as being about exercise and healthy food, explain that it helped you learn about exercise and diet while dealing with obesity, and say it could help other people understand nutrition. These details make the response relevant, but the book’s content and your personal change are only briefly explained. For example, you mention learning the benefits of a healthy diet without describing how this affected your choices or behaviour. The claim that it could influence others is also general; a specific example of who might benefit would make it more convincing. The letter has a recognisable purpose, but the greeting and closing should follow a more appropriate formal style for writing to a magazine editor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: it introduces the book, then discusses its effect on you, and finally considers its effect on other people. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sentences. For instance, the opening moves from a general statement about books to the title and then to the book’s contents without clear transitions. Connectors such as “but,” “as a result,” and “meanwhile” are attempted, but some do not show the intended relationship accurately. Use one main idea per sentence, and link each paragraph’s details more clearly to the relevant task point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “exercise,” “healthy diet,” “nutrition,” and “side effects,” so the reader can identify the subject of the book. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “various of exercise,” “brief detail,” “important of nutrition,” and “tricks to avoid eating outside.” The book’s title or a more precise description would also help identify it clearly. Aim to learn common word partnerships, such as “a variety of exercises,” “in detail,” and “the importance of nutrition,” and check spelling carefully. These changes would make your meaning more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses, as in “because I am also dealing with health issues” and “as a result by reading this book I learn…,” but complex sentences are often faulty and the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors with articles, plurals, agreement, and verb forms occur throughout: “many book,” “this book…influence,” and “I learn” need correction. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, with full stops and commas missing or placed awkwardly, which sometimes makes the relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause. For example: “Because I was dealing with obesity, I read the book and learned several ways to exercise.”

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