Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you about a book that play a pivotal role in my life and that book provides me multitudinous benefit in my ongoing life.

Last week, I bought Rich Dad and Poor Dad book, this book is extremely beneficial for any young individuals, who is struggling in their life in terms of finance. This book discribe about how individuals can manage their spending habits and guide us how to invest money at the young age, so we can get financial freedom in the future.

I read whole book within seven days, I have numerous things from it such as how money works in various ways. How individuals are become multi-millionaire by atlering small habits about money. Apart from this, it aslo taught me about politics and trading market even though I started investing in shares and bonds after reading this book.

I definetly believe, this book would assist every people, who are facing poverty and any financial problems even though author maintioned may techniques for growths and development.

I hope my feedback would provide you approciate contributions to the magazine.

Yours faithfully,

Piyush

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the book, explaining its influence, and discussing its potential impact on others. The tone is appropriate for a magazine contribution. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention that the book taught you about 'politics and trading market', you do not elaborate on how this specific knowledge changed your perspective or actions in a meaningful way. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanations are more detailed and provide concrete examples of the 'influence' mentioned in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Apart from this' and 'I definitely believe' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the connection between ideas is slightly disjointed, such as the transition between reading the book and the subsequent mention of politics. Improving the variety of your linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall readability and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'pivotal', 'multitudinous', and 'financial freedom'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'provide me multitudinous benefit', 'individuals are become multi-millionaire', and 'every people'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word forms (e.g., singular vs. plural, verb tenses) are used accurately in context. Expanding your range to include more precise academic or formal vocabulary would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('a book that play', 'this book discribe'), article usage ('at the young age'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. These errors are noticeable and occur frequently, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to basic subject-verb agreement and proofread your work to identify missing words or incorrect verb forms before finalizing your response.

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