Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest to be the part of the article called "The Book that infuenced me most'. I recently read a book "The Alchemist'. And it influenced me the most. The book is about the shephered. Who travel to egypt in search of hidden treasure he saw in his dream.During hi journy he faced many difficulties but he stay focused on his goal and God helps him to find his treasure.

Moreover, they also mention some characters in the story who could not achive their life goals and it regrets them all their life. This book teaches me that no matter what happen in life. We should stay focused on our long term goal. With consistency and focus mind we can achive any goal.

I belive that this book will help other peoples to understand the importance of having a goal and making all the affort to achive the goal.

Which will change the way of thinking of the people who stuck on same daily routine and do not have any life goal.

Therefore, I request you to kindly consider my request and include this book in the article. I am looking forward to hearing form you.

Yours faithfully

Raza Khan Taimori

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly identify the book, explain its influence on your personal goal-setting, and provide a logical argument for why it would influence others. The ideas are relevant and the tone is appropriate for a magazine contribution. However, the development of the ideas is somewhat basic. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of how the book's themes directly changed your daily habits or decision-making processes, rather than relying on general statements about 'staying focused'. Overall, the task is fulfilled adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Therefore', and 'In addition' (implied). However, the flow between sentences is sometimes hindered by short, fragmented sentences, such as 'I recently read a book "The Alchemist". And it influenced me the most.' These should be combined to improve the flow. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, and the transition between the summary of the book and its personal impact could be smoother to create a more cohesive narrative.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'consistency', 'long-term goal', and 'influence'. However, there are several spelling errors ('shephered', 'egypt', 'journy', 'achive', 'affort', 'belive') and some awkward phrasing ('express my interest to be the part of'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent the message from being understood. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and expanding your range of collocations to sound more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('it regrets them'), missing articles, and punctuation errors (e.g., starting sentences with 'And' or 'Which'). Some sentences are grammatically incomplete or incorrectly punctuated, such as 'The book is about the shephered. Who travel to egypt...'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. Increasing the variety of error-free complex sentences is necessary for a higher band.

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