Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

My name is Hardik Sonani. I am writing this letter about the magazine which you write " The book that influenced me most". In this book you wrote about a failer sportsman who got gold medal after so many lossing matches. sportsman name Rohan who faced manny difficult situation in his life, no family supports, nothing any appiriciate. He ignored every bad condition and just did focused in his goal and achived amount of respect as well nation proud.

I am so influenced with this, before i read this book i feel not so more confidunt on my life, i am not a stickey person with a proper goal. I am just failed in my last exam and i loose from every corner of my life. but after reading a stories about a failer sportman person i feel so confidunt in my life and i can fix my goal.

your faithfully

Hardik

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing the book, explaining its influence, and discussing its potential impact on others. However, the third bullet point is missing from your response, as you did not explicitly state whether the book would influence other people. The content is also somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the description of the book's plot is quite brief and contains several inaccuracies in expression. To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed explanation for each prompt and double-check that every requirement of the task instructions is explicitly covered in your writing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organized into two short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. While you use some basic cohesive devices like 'but' and 'after', the flow between sentences is often interrupted by grammatical errors, making the text feel repetitive. The paragraphing is minimal, and the transition between describing the book and explaining your personal reaction could be smoother. To achieve a higher score, try to use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea to improve the overall logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is quite limited and there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'failer' (failure), 'manny' (many), 'appiriciate' (appreciation), and 'stickey' (consistent/focused). These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow your meaning. You rely on simple, repetitive language to convey your ideas. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to personal growth and literature. Expanding your range of adjectives and verbs will help you express your thoughts more clearly and effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tense ('I feel not so more confidunt'), sentence structure, and word order. Many sentences are simple, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. These errors are frequent and sometimes impede the clarity of your message. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of tenses. Practicing the difference between simple and complex sentences will also help you demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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