Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this to let you know about book that I loved the most "The Rules Of Motivation" is really masterpiece.

I recently bought this book from the library to become more motivated and descplined at workplace. This book not only talk about the various reasons why we feel dismotivated but also tells us how to control that emotions. Moreover, this also explains more about the factors that helps you to concentrate into your work.

At the first, i am feeling very laziness and dismotivated, then I bought this book and start to reading it and it makes big changes in my life. After learing about how to stay focused in one task, now i can work very well for the long time without feeling boared.

Meanwhile, many people thinks that books can not change your behaviour, this book would help them to make big and vital changes in life, Like students can study for the long time without being distrected and works can easily work for the long time. At the end, I would say this book is very very instresting and influencing. Thanks you for your time.

Your faithfully,

Hirenkumar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: describing the book, explaining its influence, and discussing its potential impact on others. The tone is appropriate for a magazine contribution. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how the book influenced you is a bit repetitive, focusing primarily on 'laziness' and 'motivation' without providing deeper insight. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your personal experiences with more specific examples of how the book changed your perspective or daily habits. The response is clear and relevant throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'At the first', and 'Meanwhile' to link sentences. However, some of these transitions are used incorrectly or sound unnatural, such as 'At the first' (should be 'At first') and 'Meanwhile' (which is not the best fit for introducing a counter-argument). Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'masterpiece', 'concentrate', and 'distracted'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'dismotivated' (unmotivated), 'boared' (bored), and 'works can easily work' (workers can easily work). These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent communication. To improve, focus on learning the correct forms of words and common collocations. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise adjectives and adverbs would also help you express your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('this book not only talk'), article usage ('about book'), and tense consistency ('I am feeling very laziness'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage and sentence boundaries. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of basic English grammar rules. Focusing on sentence construction and verb forms will help improve your accuracy.

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