Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir and madam

i am one bookholic person and i read ample of books in my entire lifespan. there is one book names 48 laws of power written by roberts greene .

it explains who society and work controlled by upper society of world . like a , rockschild family.

furthermore, writer explains each and every law work .this book is mind changing for humans .

anyone whats to apply in their life or daily routine.In addition to this, i noticed in few weeks in

completely flip my aura negative to positive side . for this i met one renowned personality of

business as well as i closely noticed all mentioned moves in a book

In addition to this, book should surely influenced any age group person because writter mentions thoughts in a book . unable to find in society or in our daily life .

i requested to editior of a magzine to contributes 48 laws of power in your article .when should a magzine published in market .

your sincerly

kamal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully described the book (The 48 Laws of Power by Robert Greene), explained how it influenced you by helping shift your perspective from negative to positive and introducing you to a business professional, and stated whether it would likely influence others. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and constrained by frequent expression issues. For example, your description of the book's content regarding 'upper society of world' is brief and slightly unclear. To achieve a higher band, the ideas need to be more fully extended and supported with greater clarity in how the book specifically impacts the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter opens with the requested greeting 'Dear Sir or Madam,' although you misspelled it in the text. The text is broken into multiple paragraphs, attempting an overall structure suitable for a letter. However, logical progression is hindered by choppy sentences and repetitive use of cohesive devices like 'In addition to this,' which appears twice in close proximity. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the sudden shift to discussing a business personality and magazine publication in the concluding remarks without smooth transitions. Paragraphing is also erratic, with single-sentence paragraphs breaking the flow of ideas, leading to an overall disjointed reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range appropriate for this task. You attempted some less common items such as 'bookholic' (which is non-standard), 'lifespan', and 'renowned personality', but these are accompanied by notable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'upper society of world', 'mind changing', and 'flip my aura'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'roberts' instead of Robert, 'writter' instead of writer, 'editior' instead of editor, and 'magzine' instead of magazine. These inaccuracies cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The writing relies heavily on simple sentences and basic structures. When you attempt complex sentences, they are frequently faulty, featuring missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation issues. Examples include 'i am one bookholic person and i read ample of books in my entire lifespan' and 'anyone whats to apply in their life or daily routine.' Furthermore, capitalization is largely ignored at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns ('kamal', 'roberts greene'). Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, often straining meaning and making it difficult for the reader to follow complex thoughts seamlessly.

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