Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Sir

Hello sir,i hope you are doing well.The purpose of my writing is an article which name is

diabeties mellitus.It is my famous article.i influenced the most.Because this article give me a

new knowledge.It improves vocublary.it improves concentration.it influenced other people by

knowledge of many diseases.A new technique which name is Global Longitudnal Strain.It

detects the myocardium of the heart.A global longitudnal strain detects the Diabetes mellitus.

There are many symptoms of diabetes mellitus which are hypoglyecemia,increased blood

sugar,more thursts.This was very preety book.This book is most amazing.I want to writes an

articles in it.And i want to publish this book in journals.Many books journals are not accepted.

But there are many books which do not publish it.So this article is very important.This book is

very intersting.i recommends other people of this book.Because this book gives us more

knowledge about diabeties mellitus.People should aware of diabeties mellitus.Now a days

diabeties mellitus is a world wide disease in the word.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The candidate has attempted to address the prompt regarding a book that influenced them most, though the response struggles heavily with the concept of a 'book', frequently switching to discussing an 'article' about diabetes mellitus. Despite this thematic confusion, the response does manage to partially cover the bullet points: it attempts to describe the content (e.g., Global Longitudinal Strain, symptoms), mentions how it influenced them (improving vocabulary and knowledge), and touches upon whether it would influence others. However, the ideas are quite limited, repetitive, and under-developed. The tone of a letter to an editor is also poorly maintained, with abrupt statements and fragmented thoughts. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors, where the task is addressed only minimally and ideas lack proper extension and support.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers significantly from a lack of logical organisation and proper cohesion. The candidate does not use paragraphing appropriately, presenting almost the entire text as a single block of broken sentences or isolated lines. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive referencing such as 'This book', 'This article', and 'Because this' starting consecutive sentences. There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the abrupt transitions between the book's content, publishing aspirations, and general medical statements make the flow disjointed and difficult to follow. These features reflect the Band 4 descriptor, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently and progression is lacking.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases, such as 'very preety book', 'very intersting', and repetitive mentions of 'diabeties mellitus' (which is also misspelled). While there is an attempt to use some less common medical terminology like 'Global Longitudnal Strain' and 'myocardium', these terms are used awkwardly and coupled with severe spelling and word-choice errors (e.g., 'vocublary', 'thursts', 'writes an articles'). The lexical range is limited and frequently strains the reader's understanding, which places the response firmly within the Band 4 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, disjointed sentences and fragments (e.g., 'It is my famous article. i influenced the most. Because this article give me a new knowledge.'). There are frequent and basic grammatical errors throughout, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'article give', 'book gives us'), tense inconsistencies, incorrect capitalization, and punctuation failures (e.g., missing spaces after periods). Complex sentence structures are virtually absent, and the heavy accumulation of errors frequently distorts meaning and causes severe difficulty for the reader. This performance corresponds to the Band 4 descriptor.

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