Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I bay a book shoep this book releted pakistan cultuer this book pakistan is what and which people stay in this country. pakistan stay diffrent kindess of people panjabe,pathan sindhi, and this people are diffrend culture .

panjabi people:

panjabi a large amount stay in panjab and diffrent hobies like banjabi people is very kind,hospitality,and great people.

pathan people:

pathan stay in pakistan in diffrent proventes and the people is pthan is very aggressive and it is very hardwerk people.

Sindhi people:

Sindhi people is very kind,good, and the great full people sindhi a larg amount stay in Sind and they stay in other diestriec.

Pakistan dishes:

Pakistani dishes is very papuler in diddrent countryes and the people of other people his food of pakistan like baryani, chkan krahi and tea is the most popular in pakistan.

Influence other people:

Yes, this book influenc other people because this book show pakistani culture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify a book about Pakistani culture and include information about communities, food, and whether it could influence others. However, the task is addressed only minimally: the book itself is not clearly named or described as a particular book, and the response reads more like notes about Pakistan than a letter to a magazine editor. The main personal element is missing: you do not explain how the book influenced you. The final statement, “this book show pakistani culture,” gives only a brief reason why it might affect other readers. To develop the response, describe the book’s content in a focused way, explain a specific change in your own views or actions, and address the editor in a suitable closing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The headings “panjabi people,” “pathan people,” “Sindhi people,” and “Pakistan dishes” make the topics visible, and the response moves from cultural groups to food and then to influence. However, the ideas are not arranged as a coherent letter, and the list-like structure does not create a clear progression toward explaining your personal experience. Connections between points are limited, while repeated openings such as “people” and “this book” make the writing feel repetitive. Some sentences are difficult to follow because ideas are placed together without clear links. Organise the response into paragraphs for the book’s content, your personal influence, and its likely effect on others; use linking phrases to show how each point relates to the book.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic set of relevant words, including “culture,” “aggressive,” “hospitality,” and “popular,” and the reader can recognise the general subject. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate, with frequent spelling problems such as “diffrend,” “proventes,” and “papuler.” Some expressions are unclear or unnatural, for example “the people of other people his food” and “a large amount stay.” These errors strain the reader’s effort to understand details. Build accuracy with common collocations such as “people from different regions,” “traditional dishes,” and “the book describes,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for the book’s message and its effect on you would also help communicate the task more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response mainly uses short, simple statements and headings, so there is little variety in sentence structure. Frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, and subject–verb agreement sometimes distort meaning. For example, “Pakistan stay different kindess of people” does not form a clear grammatical sentence, and “Sindhi people is very kind” has an agreement problem. The opening, “I bay a book,” also does not clearly express the intended idea. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly in the lists and sentence boundaries. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The book describes several cultural groups in Pakistan,” then add a second clause to explain your response to the information.

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