Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter

- describe what this book was about
- explain how this book influenced you
- say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to express my throughts about this book recently, i had completed it.

firstly, the book was about travels to kasmir.it was fantastic place and plasent werther. The author decribe true essence of kasmir hospitalite and peaceful lifestyle of the region.

Moreover,the influence me deeply by completly alter my opinion on travel before readling it i soley visit strandards tourist destinationas .

However, the book is amazing I influence all people to read the book and take idea of travles to kasmir.As well as i admire to their culture. Which is reduce my daily street and anxity.

i strongly believe this book would likely influence other reader aswell. It has power to motiavate people to step out of their comfront zones and I am reccomed to my friend to read this book its changed your lifestyle and their perspactive after reading.

yours faithfully

aftab

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three points: you identify the book as being about travel in Kashmir, describe its hospitality and peaceful lifestyle, and explain that it changed your attitude to travel and may encourage others to visit. This gives the letter a relevant purpose and a clear personal response. However, the account is brief and some ideas are difficult to interpret, particularly “Which is reduce my daily street and anxity” and the claim that the book will change readers’ lifestyles. The book itself is not named, and the influence on you would be clearer with a specific example of what you now do or think differently. Develop these points and make the recommendation more precise to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the book, describes its subject, then discusses its effect and recommends it to other readers. Connectors such as “firstly,” “Moreover,” and “However” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression is not always clear: “However” does not introduce a contrast, and “Which is reduce…” is separated from the idea it appears to explain. The letter is also presented as one continuous block, so the different task points are not clearly grouped. Use separate paragraphs for the book’s content, its influence on you, and its likely effect on others. Choose linking expressions that accurately show the relationship between ideas, and make references such as “it” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “tourist destinations,” “culture,” “peaceful lifestyle,” and “comfort zones,” which helps communicate the general subject and your recommendation. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the message difficult to understand, for example “throughts,” “plasent werther,” “comfront zones,” and “perspactive.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “true essence of Kashmir hospitality” and “take idea of travels.” Aim to learn accurate topic-related phrases and check spelling carefully. More natural choices such as “the warmth of Kashmiri hospitality” and “inspired me to travel beyond popular destinations” would express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including “I strongly believe this book would likely influence other reader aswell,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur throughout: “the influence me deeply” needs a subject and a correctly formed verb, while “Which is reduce my daily…” is not a complete, correctly formed sentence. There are also problems with tense and agreement in “before readling it i soley visit,” and punctuation and capitalisation are often missing, as in the opening sentence. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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