Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Well,Even I am one of them.I am from Hanumangarh a beautiful city in the state Rajasthan,India.I spend my most of the life here thats why I am deeply connected to this place.Although it is not that much developed or crowed as metropolitan cities,but it offers a comfertable life.I think that this comfertability is foremost reason why some people live close to the places where they were born.

The another reason is the cultural background as in my case,the city is famous for it’s agricultural activities and it’s cultural sites.

These cultural and religious roots keep people close and connected to them.

There are a number of advantages of living in places where we were born like good personal connections,awareness of local market and historical sites.Along with this a good knowledge about the political,social and economical status of the area.Through this knowledge one can establish a good business.

Now moving towards the disadvantages or limitations of being in a one particular place are lack of excess to better employment opportunities and feeling of loneliness or homesickness. According to my personal opinion,I usually prefer to be with my existing contacts as in todays world it is quite difficult to trust new connections.It is also not easy to adapt or understand a distinct culture and environment.But just keeping myself restricted to a particular place,I am loosing the opportunity to explore many new things which I am not getting at my small city like the malls,the international restaurants and many more advance technologies .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both questions and maintain a clear personal perspective, using Hanumangarh as a relevant example. The reasons—comfort and cultural or religious roots—are identifiable, and you discuss advantages such as local connections and knowledge that could support a business, as well as disadvantages including fewer employment opportunities and limited exposure to new experiences. This covers the task well, with some ideas already supported by personal detail. However, several points are asserted rather than explained: for example, clarify how cultural sites encourage people to stay, and develop the employment disadvantage with a specific consequence or example. The discussion of loneliness and homesickness is also not clearly connected to living in one’s birthplace. More balanced explanation and support would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a broadly logical sequence: personal reasons, advantages, and then disadvantages. Linking phrases such as “The another reason,” “Along with this,” and “Now moving towards” help signal these shifts, and the personal example gives the opening a clear focus. However, the ideas are presented in long blocks without paragraph breaks, so the stages of the discussion are not visually distinct. Some transitions feel mechanical, and connections between points are occasionally unclear—for instance, “feeling of loneliness or homesickness” is listed as a disadvantage without explaining how it follows from staying in one place. Use separate paragraphs for the reasons, advantages, and disadvantages, and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “cultural and religious roots,” “employment opportunities,” “political, social and economical status,” and “adapt to a distinct culture.” These choices allow you to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “comfertable,” “crowed,” “excess” where access is intended, and “advance technologies.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “good personal connections” and “awareness of local market.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and choose words that express the intended meaning precisely. This would make your vocabulary more controlled while preserving the useful range already attempted.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast introduced by “Although” and the clause beginning “as in my case.” The main ideas are generally understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. For example, “I spend my most of the life here” has an incorrect article and word order, while “The another reason” uses an incorrect determiner. In “just keeping myself restricted to a particular place, I am loosing the opportunity,” the opening phrase does not connect smoothly to the main clause, and the tense choice is awkward. Several sentences also run together because spaces after commas and full stops are missing. Review articles, sentence boundaries, and clause construction, then proofread punctuation.

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