Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

few individuals spend many of thier live living near to there motherland . there are many reason . meanwhile we will discuss reason and but are benefit and drawbacks of this trend.

to begin with there are several reason.but first and formost is comfort zone , nowdays peaple aviod to migrate from one place to other because they have attach emotion with area from there childhood but not only with area but also with other docity members as a result, peaple are stick with there childhood . secondly, to save money when one individual moves from one plavce to other. they require money but also time to move product. like as , furtinue other products

on other hand , there are manyadvantage and disadvantage .while , essay to communicate with socity when we are living on one place from long time peaple make do social connection and political as. a consequence , they can solve issue easly with good connection in socity in . while advantage there are also diadvantages such do. not have experience of other culture and different weather in addtional , when peaple live in diiferent socity they learn diiferent clothes and food which they can do have experience in there motherland

there are numerious of reason why individual do not migrate such as comfort zone and also to save mony but it have own benefits and drawbacks which is discuss in upper essay

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions by suggesting emotional attachment and the cost and effort of moving as reasons, then mentioning social connections and limited exposure to other cultures as advantages and disadvantages. These are relevant points, but they are only briefly stated: for example, the idea that local connections help people “solve issue” is not explained with a specific situation or example. The discussion of disadvantages is also unclear, particularly the point about learning different clothes and food. The conclusion repeats the reasons and says there are benefits and drawbacks, but does not clearly summarise or evaluate them. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Develop each main idea with explanation or an example, and make the advantages and disadvantages explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is some basic organisation. The first body paragraph focuses on reasons, while the next attempts to discuss advantages and disadvantages. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: the second body paragraph shifts between social connections, political connections and cultural experience without clearly separating the points. Linking expressions such as “to begin with,” “secondly” and “on other hand” show an effort to connect ideas, but some are used inaccurately or do not clarify the relationship between sentences. The conclusion largely repeats earlier content. Use one clear paragraph for each part of the task, and connect each claim to its explanation with precise referencing and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “comfort zone,” “migrate,” “social connection” and “culture,” and these choices help communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, such as “people,” “reason” and “different.” Frequent spelling errors—including “thier,” “peaple,” “plavce” and “diadvantages”—make the writing harder to read. Some combinations are also unclear or unnatural, such as “other docity members” and “political as.” Aim to use accurate, topic-specific phrases and check spelling carefully. For instance, “emotional attachment to their local area” would express one of your reasons more clearly than the current wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to form longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure with “as a result,” and you use basic sentence patterns to present reasons and consequences. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms occur frequently enough to make several ideas difficult to understand. For example, “there are many reason” has a number-agreement error, while “when one individual moves… they require money” shifts between singular and plural reference. Several sentences are incomplete or joined unclearly, including “like as, furtinue other products” and “while advantage there are also diadvantages.” Practise writing complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement, articles, plurals and punctuation before submitting.

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