Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Yes, most of the people chose to live close to where they are born because i believe they are so rooted in their roots and prinviples, that they live in a bubble of seeing the world through the eyes of their ancestors and customs linked to them.

Most people who lives with this specific mindset are more of viewing the life through the lens of what they believe the life is and should be. They are mostly regarded as the most strong and rigid mindsets at the same time. Reason given that as a person grows bigger, their perspectives gets changed and they evolve. But, the ones with this nature refuses to change thier beliefs and what is being taught to them in their early years.

Mostly the reasons behind this, if we trace the lines of these beliefs in a person. That why it so ingrained in there personality is because they are introvert and as an introvert is an overthinker. They overthink everything and also have some main personalities in their lives, who inspires them to be ito something which remains long enough with them.

Moreover, if we talk about the advantages of these, is something that makes a person confident in the decisions they make during their life and not just follow the deteriorating trends. additionally, there are some disadvantages to this as well. As, one cannot adapt and evolve with their surroundings and may feel a bit alone even in a crowd, as they havd not been evolved in current life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by suggesting that people stay near their birthplace because of family influence, familiar customs and established beliefs, then identifying confidence and difficulty adapting as possible advantages and disadvantages. However, the response only partially develops these points. The explanation that people are “rooted in their roots” is repeated in different forms, while the claim that they are introverted overthinkers is asserted rather than supported or clearly connected to staying in one place. The advantages are also brief and general, and there is no specific example to illustrate them. Make the reasons more directly relevant—for example, family responsibilities, employment, affordability or attachment to community—and explain each effect with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins with a general explanation, continues with reasons, and then turns to advantages and disadvantages. Paragraph breaks help signal these stages. However, the overall progression is not always clear because several paragraphs repeat the idea of fixed beliefs without adding a distinct point. Some links are awkward or incomplete, such as “Mostly the reasons behind this” and “That why it so ingrained,” which make the relationship between sentences difficult to follow. The final paragraph also moves quickly from advantages to disadvantages. Give each paragraph one clear purpose, use topic sentences, and connect each reason to the question of why someone remains near their birthplace.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt some topic-related and less common expressions, including “rooted,” “perspectives,” “rigid mindsets,” “adapt and evolve,” and “deteriorating trends.” This shows an effort to express abstract ideas, but the range is limited by repetition and several inaccurate or unnatural choices that can make meaning unclear. For instance, “rooted in their roots” is redundant, “viewing the life through the lens” is awkward, and “inspired them to be ito something” does not communicate a clear idea. Spelling errors such as “prinviples,” “thier” and “havd” also affect readability. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “as a person grows bigger, their perspectives gets changed and they evolve,” but these structures are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur frequently: “most people who lives,” “perspectives gets changed,” and “the ones … refuses.” There are also incomplete or poorly formed sentences, including “Reason given that…” and “That why it so ingrained…,” as well as inconsistent punctuation and capitalisation. These problems sometimes make the intended relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “although” and “as.” Check subject–verb agreement and sentence completeness during revision.

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