Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Few individual spend lot of time stay living close to their hometown. I think disadvantages is outwith the advantages.I will list the reson with relevant exampal upcoming paragraph.

To start with, one of the main reason is that family conection.Most of people lives with family. Moreover people often feel emotionally atteached to their homtown.Another faactor is cultural attechment.Many people prefer to main financial stability.

on thel other hand, people receive help frome family membes.They may already own a house and know affordable local facilities. Furthermore, they can maintain relationship with childhood friends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies plausible reasons for staying near one’s birthplace, including family connection, emotional and cultural attachment, and financial stability. It also gives some advantages, such as help from relatives, access to affordable local facilities, and keeping childhood friendships. However, the task asks for both reasons and advantages and disadvantages, and no disadvantages are explained; the opening claim that there are disadvantages is not followed by any examples. The ideas are also only listed, with little explanation or supporting detail, so the response addresses the task only partially. The required minimum of 250 words is not met: the response contains 92 words. To improve, cover both sides explicitly and develop each point with a reason or relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening statement is followed by a paragraph about reasons and a contrastive transition, “on the other hand,” before the advantages. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is incomplete because the promised discussion of disadvantages never appears, and the ideas within each paragraph are mostly presented as a list rather than linked and developed. The phrase “I will list the reson with relevant exampal upcoming paragraph” also does not clearly guide the reader, while the contrast marker introduces advantages without a clear preceding discussion of disadvantages. Use separate paragraphs for reasons, advantages, and disadvantages, and connect each point to an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant topic words and phrases, including “family connection,” “emotionally attached,” “cultural attachment,” “financial stability,” and “affordable local facilities.” These show an attempt to discuss the topic rather than relying entirely on very general vocabulary. However, the range is limited, and several spelling errors make the wording less clear, such as “reson,” “exampal,” “homtown,” and “membes.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “Few individual spend lot of time stay living” and “main financial stability” do not communicate the intended ideas smoothly. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for reasons and consequences, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “Moreover,” “Another,” and “Furthermore.” This provides some basic sentence variety, but there is little evidence of controlled complex structures. Errors in agreement and sentence construction occur in examples such as “Few individual spend” and “Most of people lives with family.” The opening sentence, “Few individual spend lot of time stay living close to their hometown,” is also difficult to follow because its verb pattern is not formed correctly. Missing articles and punctuation problems appear in “one of the main reason is that family conection.Most of people…” Aim for accurate simple sentences first, then practise adding clauses with “because,” “although,” and “which.”

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